自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details (max 4–5 short sentences). Correct verb forms and word choice: say "Yes, I did" or "Yes, I had a bike"; use past tense consistently. Add one specific detail and link it with a connective. Avoid unnecessary phrases.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to visit friends and to go to the local supermarket. For example, I would cycle with my mother on weekends to buy groceries. Riding a bike was a convenient and enjoyable way to travel short distances.

建议: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Correct word choice ("bike" not "fight"), fix grammar ("people who wish to ride a bike"), and be concise. Provide one or two concrete examples (traffic, lack of bike lanes, safety concerns) and use linking words like "because", "for example", "however".

示例: Personally, I don't think bikes are very popular in Thailand, especially in Bangkok. This is because there are few dedicated bicycle lanes and traffic is heavy, so cycling feels unsafe. For example, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for daily travel due to the risk of accidents. However, some communities are trying to promote cycling by creating safer routes.

× Yes, of course I have.

✓ Yes, of course I did.

The question asked about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so the response must be in past tense. Using 'have' (present) is incorrect. Change to the past simple 'did'. For more natural speech you can also say 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had one.'

× Since I was young I used to buy to travel in a short distance with my friends and my mother as well.

✓ Since I was young, I used it to travel short distances with my friends and with my mother.

The original has several issues: 'used to buy' is incorrect for habitual past use of something you owned; 'buy' is wrong verb here. The phrase 'to travel in a short distance' has wrong preposition and article use. Replace 'used to buy' with 'used it' to indicate habitual use of the bike, or 'I used to ride it.' Use 'short distances' (plural) and preposition 'to travel short distances'. Add a comma after the time clause. Suggestion: 'Since I was young, I used to ride it to travel short distances with my friends and my mother.'

× For instance like go to the supermarket by bike.

✓ For instance, I would go to the supermarket by bike.

The fragment 'For instance like go' is ungrammatical: 'like' is unnecessary and the verb needs a subject and correct tense. Use 'I would go' or 'I went' to match past habit. Add a comma after 'For instance.'

× So personally I think that the fight is not quite popular in my country because in Thailand, especially in Bangkok, there is no bicycle lane for for the person who wish to like the bike.

✓ So personally I think that cycling is not very popular in my country because in Thailand, especially in Bangkok, there are no bicycle lanes for people who want to ride bikes.

Multiple problems: 'the fight' is a wrong word; the intended noun is 'cycling' or 'bicycles.' 'Not quite popular' is awkward; 'not very popular' is better. 'There is no bicycle lane' must agree in number with 'lanes' (plural) and use 'there are' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'for for the person who wish to like the bike' has repeated word, wrong article, wrong verb form ('wish' should be 'wishes' if singular, but here use plural 'people who want to ride bikes'). Use 'people who want to ride bikes.'

× So therefore it's very slight dangerous and the safety reasons.

✓ Therefore it is quite dangerous for safety reasons.

Problems: 'So therefore' is redundant; choose 'Therefore' or 'So.' 'Very slight dangerous' is ungrammatical—use 'quite dangerous' or 'a little dangerous.' 'And the safety reasons' is not a valid clause; use 'for safety reasons' to explain why. The corrected sentence 'Therefore it is quite dangerous for safety reasons' is concise and grammatical.