自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and sentence structure, reduce repetition, and organise the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by concise supporting details. Use past tense consistently (e.g., taught, knew) and avoid filler words like “umm.” Add one specific detail (age or place) to make the answer more vivid. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about eight; it actually belonged to my brother but my father taught me to ride it first. After a few lessons my father removed the training wheels and I finally learned to balance on my own, which made me very excited. Even so, I was a little afraid of traffic for a while.

建议: Be more decisive and organise your answer with a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and examples. Correct common errors (bikes, have/has) and use linking words (however, although, for example). Mention who rides bikes and in what situations to provide concrete evidence. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: I think bikes are moderately popular in my country. Although most people prefer cars and motorcycles for daily travel, cycling is common among children and young people as a leisure activity or sport. For example, many schools organise cycling clubs and weekend races, but few adults use bikes for commuting.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a kid, it was supposed to be my brother's bike but my father teach me first.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a kid; it was supposed to be my brother's bike, but my father taught me first.

Use simple past tense for completed actions in the past. 'Did have' is unnecessary here; 'had' is correct. 'Teach' should be past 'taught' to match the past timeframe. Also use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses and add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense verbs for events that happened in the past (had, taught).

× So when my father teach me how to ride a bike, I was very excited and after I knew how to ride 1 umm, the training wheels got removed and was very happy because I finally know how to ride a bike.

✓ So when my father taught me how to ride a bike, I was very excited, and after I learned how to ride, the training wheels were removed and I was very happy because I finally knew how to ride a bike.

Maintain past tense throughout. 'Teach' should be 'taught'; 'knew' or 'learned' fits past; 'know' must be past 'knew'. Also 'got removed' is informal passive—'were removed' is better, and include subject 'I was very happy'. Remove filler '1 umm'. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in past tense when recounting past events and include subjects for clarity.

× But even though that I finally know how to ride a bike, I still I'm afraid.

✓ But even though I finally knew how to ride a bike, I was still afraid.

Tense mismatch: recounting past events requires past tense 'knew' and 'was afraid' instead of present 'know' and 'I'm afraid'. Also remove unnecessary 'that' and correct word order 'I was still afraid'. Suggestion: Match tense across the sentence when describing past situations.

× I am not so sure if buys are popular in my country because the cars or motorcycles are more popular here.

✓ I am not so sure if bikes are popular in my country because cars and motorcycles are more popular here.

'Buys' is a misspelling of 'bikes'. Use plural 'bikes' to refer generally. Use 'cars and motorcycles' without 'the' for general statements. Also 'are more popular here' is fine. Suggestion: Check spelling and use plural nouns when speaking generally about items.

× But there are also umm kids that ride bikes and has it as a sport.

✓ But there are also kids who ride bikes and have it as a sport.

Incorrect relative pronoun and subject-verb agreement: use 'who' for people, and 'kids' (plural) requires plural verb 'have', not 'has'. 'It' refers to 'riding' or 'the bike'—'have it as a sport' is acceptable but could be 'pursue it as a sport'. Suggestion: Use 'who' for people and match verb number to the subject.

× So maybe it is popular but for some of the adults, barely adults or teenagers ride a bike.

✓ So maybe it is popular, but among adults, barely any ride a bike; mostly children or teenagers do.

Awkward and unclear phrasing 'for some of the adults, barely adults or teenagers' is confusing. Use 'among adults' and 'barely any ride a bike' to express low adult participation, and clarify that children or teenagers ride more. Also add punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: Use clear comparative phrases like 'among adults' and 'barely any' to express scarcity, and restructure sentence for clarity.