自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike, but I had a scooter.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “When I was about eight or nine, I used it to go to the park and I loved showing it to my dad.”). Watch grammar (use past simple: “I was always saying” → “I always told my dad”) and avoid repetition. Keep answers under five sentences.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike, but I had a scooter when I was about eight or nine. I used it every afternoon to ride to the park, and I always told my dad how proud I was of it.

建议: Make a clear, direct statement first, then give specific supporting reasons. Correct grammar (use present simple: “I always hear” not “I've always hearing”), and complete your thoughts. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to structure details. Keep it to two or three sentences and include specific observations (e.g., “children riding to school, bike lanes in the city”).

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and children for play. For example, I often hear bikes passing my house and see kids riding to school and people using bike lanes in the city.

× No, I didn't have a bike, but actually I, I, I had a scooter like when I was about 9 or 8, I don't remember.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike, but actually I had a scooter when I was about eight or nine; I don't remember exactly.

The sentence uses past events so past tense is required consistently. 'like when I was about 9 or 8' is informal and word order is awkward; use 'when I was about eight or nine'. Also combine clauses with proper punctuation and use 'don't remember exactly' for clarity. Use words for numbers under 10 in writing for formality.

× I remember, but I really remember that I'm always was saying to my dad, I'm on a scooter, I'm on a scooter.

✓ I remember; I really remember that I was always saying to my dad, 'I'm on a scooter, I'm on a scooter.'

The original mixes present and past forms ('I remember' present and 'I'm always was saying' which is ungrammatical). For a past habitual action use past progressive or 'used to': 'I was always saying' or 'I used to say'. The reported speech should be in quotes or marked as speech; keep tense consistent.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This question is already grammatically correct and uses present tense appropriately to ask about a general state; no correction needed.

× Yes, of course I've always hearing bike sounds in the street, especially my bedroom it just near to the streets.

✓ Yes, of course I've always heard bikes making noise in the street; my bedroom is just near the street.

'I've always hearing' is incorrect because 'have' + perfect requires past participle: 'have heard'. Also 'bike sounds' is better expressed as 'bikes making noise'. 'My bedroom it just near to the streets' has extra pronoun and wrong preposition and number: use 'my bedroom is just near the street' or 'near the streets' depending on context. Use singular 'the street' if referring to the nearby road.

× So I always listen to the you know, and the children playing with bikes and also.

✓ So I always hear them, you know, and the children playing with bikes as well.

The original has poor sentence structure and missing objects: 'listen to the you know' is incomplete. Use 'hear them' or 'hear it' depending on reference, and place 'you know' parenthetically. 'And also' at the end is redundant; replace with 'as well' or remove. Ensure the verb 'hear' is used correctly for sounds.