自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on clear grammar, correct word choice, and concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two clear supporting details. Correct common errors: use past tense consistently, say “When I was a child,” not “shy”; use “three-wheeled” instead of “triangle bike have a three wheels.” Avoid repetition and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words (e.g., “but” or “however”) only if needed.

示例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small cedar, three-wheeled bike that my parents bought for me, and I used it to ride around the neighbourhood every afternoon.

建议: Give a clear direct response first, then provide two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar and comparative forms (e.g., “more popular than in the past”). Be specific about contexts (exercise, commuting) and explain briefly why popularity is limited (road safety, infrastructure). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers like “uh.”

示例: Yes, bikes are more popular now than in the past. They are commonly used for exercise and leisure, but they are less popular for daily commuting because the roads are congested and there is limited cycling infrastructure, which makes cycling unsafe in many areas.

× When I was a shy I thought I didn't have my own bike.

✓ When I was shy, I thought I didn't have my own bike.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the adjective 'shy'. Use the adjective alone after the verb 'was' to describe a state: 'I was shy'. Also add a comma for natural pause. Suggestion: remove the article 'a' and write 'When I was shy'. This keeps tense and meaning correct.

× I bike.

✓ I had a bike.

The fragment 'I bike' is ungrammatical because it lacks a proper verb form. Use the past-tense verb 'had' to indicate possession in the past: 'I had a bike.' This matches the examiner's question about childhood.

× My cedar bike is not a 2 wheel, it's triangle bike have a three wheels.

✓ My cedar bike was not a two-wheeler; it was a triangular bike that had three wheels.

Multiple errors: 'is' should be past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'. Use 'two-wheeler' as a noun and 'triangular bike' to describe shape. The clause 'have a three wheels' is incorrect: use past tense 'had' and singular 'wheel' when counting per type ('three wheels' is correct but needs 'had' and proper article). Rewriting into a clear sentence fixes verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and noun forms. Suggestion: 'My cedar bike was not a two-wheeler; it was a triangular bike that had three wheels.'

× In my view I think uh it's now is popular than the more than in the past.

✓ In my view, I think bicycles are more popular now than they were in the past.

The original mixes tenses and has extra words: 'it's now is' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use present simple 'are' for general statement and comparative 'more popular now than they were in the past' to compare present and past. Also replace vague 'it' with 'bicycles' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify and use correct comparative structure.

× It's popular for exercise but in daily life if not they are not popular because it dangerous for life on the road.

✓ They are popular for exercise, but in daily life they are not popular because they are dangerous on the road.

Pronoun and subject references are inconsistent: 'It's' (singular) then 'they'. Use 'They' (bicycles) consistently. Also 'it dangerous' lacks the verb 'is' and needs agreement: 'they are dangerous'. Place 'on the road' after 'dangerous' for clarity. Suggestion: keep plural pronoun 'they' and include the verb 'are' for correct subject-verb agreement.