自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good personal detail, but reduce fillers (uh), tighten the structure, and add one linked supporting detail to make it more cohesive. Keep to under five sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, “so” or “because”).

示例: Yes. When I was 12 my parents bought me a second-hand mountain bike because they wanted me to have a healthy hobby. I used to ride around the park with my neighbor, and we often explored different paths, which made those afternoons really enjoyable.

建议: Your response answers the question but is disorganized and contains repetitions and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, “however” or “because”), provide a specific reason or example, and avoid vague or judgmental language. Aim for two to three concise sentences with varied vocabulary (e.g., “prefer cars” instead of “lazy”).

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my city. In my experience, most people prefer cars because the roads are busy and there is limited cycling infrastructure, so cycling is less convenient.

× Well, uh, I don't know about my country, but in my city there are not very popular.

✓ Well, uh, I don't know about my country, but in my city bicycles are not very popular.

The original sentence uses 'there are not very popular' without a clear plural noun. This is a singular/plural and sentence structure issue. You must include the noun 'bicycles' after the verb 'are' to specify what is not popular. Use the plural form 'bicycles' to match 'are'. Suggestion: name the subject (bicycles) and keep correct plural form: 'bicycles are not very popular.'

× Popular because when you go around the streets you can see people driving private, uh, vehicles.

✓ This is because when you go around the streets you can see people driving private vehicles.

Starting the sentence with 'Popular because' is a fragment and uses an incorrect pronoun/reference; 'this' should refer to the previous idea. The sentence should begin with a demonstrative pronoun 'This' or 'That' to link the explanation to the previous statement and avoid a sentence fragment. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma. Suggestion: use 'This is because...' to make a complete sentence linking cause and effect.

× And I think the population of my city is a little lazy to ride bikes and they usually ride private.

✓ And I think the population of my city is a little lazy about riding bikes, and they usually ride private vehicles.

'Lazy to ride bikes' is not natural English; the correct pattern is 'lazy about + -ing' to describe an attitude. Also 'ride private' omits the noun 'vehicles'; 'private vehicles' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'lazy about riding bikes' and include the noun 'vehicles' after 'private'.