数字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide specific examples using proper linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: No, I'm not very good at remembering numbers. For example, I often forget my relatives' birthdays and even my own. However, I can usually recall important dates like the birthdays of famous Vietnamese people. This shows that I remember numbers better when they have personal or cultural significance.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

示例: No, my future work is not related to numbers or data analysis. However, in some cases, such as measuring body angles like the femoris angle, numbers are necessary. But overall, numbers will not play a major role in my job.

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about why you enjoyed math. Keep your answer concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed studying mathematics in high school. However, my university degree is in physical education, which is quite different from math. Despite this, I still appreciate the logical thinking skills I gained from math classes.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more organized. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, correct grammar and improve sentence structure for naturalness and effectiveness.

示例: The numbers that are important to me include my own and my relatives' birthdays. Additionally, I pay attention to my car's mileage because when it reaches certain kilometers, I need to perform maintenance tasks like changing the tires.

× No, of course not. For example, I can't even remember my own birthday or other my relatives.

✓ No, of course not. For example, I can't even remember my own birthday or those of my relatives.

The phrase 'other my relatives' is incorrect because 'other' should not directly modify a possessive pronoun like 'my'. Instead, 'those of my relatives' correctly refers to the birthdays of the relatives.

× However, I I can't remember correctly the year of famous or Vietnam people's birthday.

✓ However, I can't correctly remember the year of famous people's or Vietnamese people's birthdays.

The original sentence has word order issues and incorrect adjective forms. 'Vietnam' should be 'Vietnamese' as an adjective, and 'people's birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'famous people'. Also, adverb placement is improved by placing 'correctly' before the verb.

× My future work doesn't related to any data like numbers.

✓ My future work isn't related to any data like numbers.

The verb 'related' requires the auxiliary verb 'be' in the correct form. 'Doesn't related' is incorrect; it should be 'isn't related' to form the correct passive construction.

× Maybe in some angles in bodies, for example femoris angle we need numbers, but no.

✓ Maybe in some angles in the body, for example the femoris angle, we need numbers, but no.

The phrase 'in bodies' is vague; 'in the body' is more appropriate. Also, 'femoris angle' should be preceded by 'the' as it refers to a specific anatomical angle.

× Yes, I studied mathematics in higher school.

✓ Yes, I studied mathematics in high school.

The phrase 'higher school' is incorrect; the correct term is 'high school'.

× However my university degrees is not related to mathematics.

✓ However, my university degree is not related to mathematics.

'Degrees' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular, causing disagreement. Also, if referring to one degree, 'degree' should be singular to match 'is'.

× It's physical education so different to what I was studied.

✓ It's physical education, so different from what I studied.

The correct preposition after 'different' is 'from', not 'to'. Also, 'I was studied' is incorrect; it should be 'I studied'.

× However I enjoy it.

✓ However, I enjoy it.

A comma is needed after 'However' to separate the clauses properly.

× My relatives and my own details of birthday are important and my cars kilometers because I should be aware about that.

✓ My relatives' and my own birth details are important, and my car's kilometers because I should be aware of that.

'Details of birthday' is awkward; 'birth details' is better. Also, possessive forms 'relatives'' and 'car's' are needed. 'Cars kilometers' should be 'car's kilometers'. 'Aware about' should be 'aware of'.

× In some numbers of kilometers I should change some details of my car, for example the tires.

✓ At certain kilometer readings, I should change some parts of my car, for example, the tires.

'In some numbers of kilometers' is awkward; 'at certain kilometer readings' is clearer. Also, 'details of my car' is better as 'parts of my car' when referring to components like tires.