新闻— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 첫 문장 'This.'는 불필요하며 문맥상 어색합니다. 또한, 'Care about keeping up with the news' 부분은 문법적으로 부적절하므로 수정이 필요합니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 다듬고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

示例: Yes, I am quite interested in news because it helps me stay informed about current events both locally and globally. For example, I often follow news about technology and environmental issues, which are very topical. Moreover, keeping up with the news allows me to engage in meaningful conversations with others.

建议: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 'on online reforms'는 'online platforms'로, 'This resources and companion'은 문법적으로 맞지 않습니다. 또한, 'new step'는 아마 'news app'을 의미하는 것으로 보입니다. 정확한 단어 선택과 문장 구조 개선이 필요합니다.

示例: I usually find news through online platforms such as news websites and social media. These resources provide real-time updates on various topics. For example, I often check news apps on my phone to stay informed throughout the day.

建议: 답변에 오타와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'he double s'는 의미 전달이 어렵고, 'different prospects'는 'perspectives'가 적절합니다. 문장을 명확하게 다듬고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

示例: Yes, I would like to be a journalist because it offers the opportunity to explore various topics and share important information with the public. I enjoy writing and investigating stories, which makes journalism appealing to me. Additionally, being a journalist allows me to meet different people and learn about different perspectives.

建议: 답변에서 시간 표현이 혼동을 줄 수 있습니다. 질문은 'this morning'인데 답변은 'this evening'으로 되어 있습니다. 또한, 'online news site'는 복수형 'online news sites'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 활용하세요.

示例: Yes, I read the news this morning. I usually check online news sites to stay updated on current events, and today I read about some new environmental policies being introduced. This helped me stay informed about important issues happening around the world.

建议: 답변에 인칭 오류('he' 대신 'I')와 시제 오류('discussed' 대신 'discuss')가 있습니다. 또한, 'through Planetary'는 의미가 불분명합니다. 문법과 어휘를 정확히 사용하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하세요.

示例: Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends, especially current events that affect our daily lives. For example, we frequently talk about political developments or environmental issues, which helps us stay informed and share different perspectives. These conversations also make it easier to understand complex topics through discussion.

× This. I'm quite interested in news because it helps me stay informed about current events locally and globally.

✓ I am quite interested in the news because it helps me stay informed about current events locally and globally.

The sentence starts with 'This.' which is incomplete and unclear. It should be rephrased to a complete sentence for clarity and correctness.

× Care about keeping up with the news also allows me to engage in meaningful conversation with others.

✓ Caring about keeping up with the news also allows me to engage in meaningful conversations with others.

The phrase 'Care about' is incorrect here; it should be the gerund form 'Caring about' to function as the subject of the sentence. Also, 'conversation' should be plural to match the context.

× I usually find the news through on online reforms such as news websites and social media.

✓ I usually find the news through online platforms such as news websites and social media.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used before 'online reforms'. Also, 'reforms' is incorrect in this context; 'platforms' or 'sources' is more appropriate.

× This resources and companion and provide real time update on various topics.

✓ These resources and companies provide real-time updates on various topics.

'This' should be 'These' to agree with the plural noun 'resources'. 'Companion' is likely a typo for 'companies'. 'Update' should be plural 'updates' and 'real time' should be hyphenated as 'real-time'.

× For example, I often check new step on my phone to stay informed throughout the day.

✓ For example, I often check news apps on my phone to stay informed throughout the day.

'New step' is incorrect; likely intended 'news app'. The preposition 'on' is correct here for 'on my phone'.

× Yes, I would like to be a journalist because he double s the opportunity to explore various topics and share important information with the public.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a journalist because it doubles the opportunity to explore various topics and share important information with the public.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect; it should be 'it' referring to the role of a journalist. The verb 'double s' should be 'doubles' to agree with the singular subject.

× Additionally, being a journalist allows me to meet different people and learn about different prospects.

✓ Additionally, being a journalist allows me to meet different people and learn about different prospects.

No correction needed here; sentence is correct.

× Yes, I read the news this evening.

✓ Yes, I read the news this morning.

The question asks about reading the news 'this morning', so the answer should match the time frame. 'Read' is past tense but pronounced differently; context is important.

× I usually check online news site to stay updated on current events and today I read about some new environmental policies being introduced.

✓ I usually check online news sites to stay updated on current events and today I read about some new environmental policies being introduced.

'News site' should be plural 'news sites' to indicate multiple sources.

× Yes, he often discussed the news with my friends, especially current events that affect our daily lives.

✓ Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends, especially current events that affect our daily lives.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect; it should be 'I' to match the speaker. The verb 'discussed' should be present tense 'discuss' to match 'often' indicating habitual action.

× For example, we frequently talk about the political developments or environmental issues, which helps us stay informed and share different perspectives.

✓ For example, we frequently talk about political developments and environmental issues, which help us stay informed and share different perspectives.

Using 'or' suggests only one topic at a time; 'and' is better to include both topics. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural subject 'developments and issues'.

× This conversation also make it easier to understand complex topics through Planetary.

✓ These conversations also make it easier to understand complex topics through dialogue.

'This conversation' should be plural 'These conversations' to match the context of ongoing discussions. 'Make' is correct for plural subject. 'Planetary' seems incorrect or a typo; replaced with 'dialogue' for clarity.