新闻— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复使用相同词汇，并注意介词的正确使用。

示例: I'm not very interested in political or financial news, but I enjoy reading entertainment news, such as new movies and celebrity gossip.

建议: 回答中重复提及'Tiktok'且语句不够流畅。建议避免重复，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: I usually get news from social media platforms like TikTok and YouTube channels.

建议: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且句子结构混乱。建议简化表达，明确回答并提供理由，避免使用错误词汇。

示例: I am not interested in being a journalist because I studied community and social media. I prefer design since I am a shy person.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题。建议注意时态和介词的正确使用，并使句子完整连贯。

示例: I didn't read political or financial news this morning, but I read some entertainment news on TikTok and YouTube while having breakfast. It is a flexible time for me to catch up quickly.

建议: 回答中重复使用填充词，句子结构混乱且不完整。建议减少重复，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并补充完整句子。

示例: Yes, sometimes we talk about entertainment news, such as new movies and celebrity gossip, discussing what's happening in the entertainment world.

× I'm, I'm not very interested about political or financial news, but I really like, enjoy reading entertainment news like, uh, new movies or gossips.

✓ I'm not very interested in political or financial news, but I really like and enjoy reading entertainment news like new movies or gossip.

介词“interested”后应接介词“in”，而不是“about”。此外，“gossips”应为不可数名词“gossip”。建议记住固定搭配“interested in”。

× I usually find news in social media such as Tiktok or umm, Tiktok or YouTube channels.

✓ I usually find news on social media such as TikTok or YouTube channels.

“find news”后面应使用介词“on”表示在某个平台上，而不是“in”。“social media”作为平台，常用介词“on”。

× I not very interesting to be a generalized because my bachelor is community and social media beggars, so we also study a little bit about generalize on the design bar. I prefer design is much better because I'm very shy person. I.

✓ I'm not very interested in being a journalist because my bachelor's degree is in community and social media studies, so we also study a little bit about journalism and design. I prefer design because I'm a very shy person.

句子中“interesting”应为“interested”，且“generalized”应为“journalist”。“bachelor is community and social media beggars”表达错误，应为“bachelor's degree in community and social media studies”。“prefer design is much better”结构不正确，应简化为“prefer design”。此外，句子结构混乱，需调整语序和用词。

× I didn't read the political or financial news in this morning, but I read some entertainment news on Tiktok on YouTube when I have breakfast.

✓ I didn't read the political or financial news this morning, but I read some entertainment news on TikTok and YouTube when I was having breakfast.

“in this morning”应改为“this morning”，因为“morning”前不加介词“in”。“when I have breakfast”时态应与过去时一致，改为“when I was having breakfast”。

× It's very flexible time I can read quickly on.

✓ It's a very flexible time when I can read quickly.

原句中“on”使用错误，且句子结构不完整。应使用“when”引导时间状语从句，表达“这是一个我可以快速阅读的灵活时间”。

× Yes, sometimes we talk about the umm entertainment news like umm like new movies and celebrity gossips like we always talk about the like what's going on in this entertainment world and there have new.

✓ Yes, sometimes we talk about entertainment news like new movies and celebrity gossip. We always talk about what's going on in the entertainment world and any new things happening.

“celebrity gossips”应为不可数名词“celebrity gossip”。句子中“there have new”结构不完整，应补充完整表达。建议简化句子，避免重复使用“like”。