新闻— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "listening to news" twice and improve sentence structure for better flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I am very interested in news, especially international and local updates. For example, recently I heard about a new trend in health equipment on the radio, which I found quite fascinating.

建议: Your answer contains some grammar and vocabulary errors (e.g., 'upstate' instead of 'updates') and sentence fragments. Try to use complete sentences and correct word choices. Also, organise your answer logically with linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I usually get my news from online websites and social media platforms because they are quick and easy to access. For instance, I often read articles about new fashion trends, which help me stay updated and make better choices when shopping.

建议: There are several language errors and unclear phrases (e.g., 'Hariri enjoy', 'procrastinating their nose'). Try to avoid such mistakes and express your ideas clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your opinions logically.

示例: To be honest, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because it seems like a very challenging and demanding job. However, I enjoy listening to journalists when they report on important events, as they provide valuable information. Although I admire their work, I prefer to follow their reports rather than pursue that career myself.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'followed like 5 News', 'It's updates me on several'). Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid listing times without clear context and keep your answer concise.

示例: Yes, I have read several news updates this morning, including reports on health, fashion, and sports. They helped me stay informed about current events.

建议: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but watch for minor grammar errors such as singular/plural agreement ('trending topic' should be 'trending topics'). Also, use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repetition.

示例: Definitely, I often discuss the news with my friends and colleagues, especially about fashion and health, because we enjoy keeping up with trending topics. For example, two days ago we spent a lot of time talking about the latest fashion trends and health tips we had recently heard about.

× I usually find news very informative because it provides upstate on current events and trends.

✓ I usually find news very informative because it provides updates on current events and trends.

The word 'upstate' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'updates' which fits the context of providing current information. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than a strict grammar issue, but it affects the present tense meaning of the sentence.

× which help me stay updated and make better choice.

✓ which help me stay updated and make better choices.

The noun 'choice' should be plural 'choices' because it refers to multiple options. This is a singular and plural issue where the plural form is required to match the context.

× When shopping.

✓ When shopping,

The phrase 'When shopping.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma to form a complete sentence.

× However, Hariri enjoy listening to journalists when they are procrastinating their nose or reporting on important events as they provide valuable information.

✓ However, I enjoy listening to journalists when they are presenting the news or reporting on important events as they provide valuable information.

The pronoun 'Hariri' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'I'. Also, 'procrastinating their nose' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'presenting the news'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and vocabulary error affecting clarity.

× Although admire the work they do, I prefer to follow their reports rather than pursuing their career myself.

✓ Although I admire the work they do, I prefer to follow their reports rather than pursue their career myself.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' after 'Although' and the verb form after 'rather than' should be the base form 'pursue' not 'pursuing'. This is a sentence structure error.

× I have followed like 5 News this morning, 9:00, ten o'clock, 12:00 and 2:00 news.

✓ I have followed about 5 news broadcasts this morning: 9:00, ten o'clock, 12:00 and 2:00 news.

The word 'like' is informal and incorrect here; 'about' is more appropriate for quantifying approximate numbers. Also, 'News' should not be capitalized and 'news broadcasts' clarifies the meaning.

× They have talked about various information both on health, fashion and sports.

✓ They have talked about various information on health, fashion and sports.

The preposition 'both on' is incorrect; 'on' alone is sufficient when listing multiple topics. Also, 'various information' is acceptable but 'various pieces of information' would be more precise.

× It's updates me on several.

✓ It updates me on several topics.

The phrase 'It's updates me' is incorrect; the correct form is 'It updates me'. Also, 'on several' is incomplete and should specify what 'several' refers to, such as 'topics'.

× we enjoy keeping up with trending topic in this area.

✓ we enjoy keeping up with trending topics in this area.

The noun 'topic' should be plural 'topics' to agree with 'trending' and the context of multiple subjects. This is a singular and plural issue.

× we spent a lot of time discussing the latest fashion trend and health tip we have recently heard about.

✓ we spent a lot of time discussing the latest fashion trends and health tips we have recently heard about.

Both 'trend' and 'tip' should be plural to match the context of multiple items being discussed. This is a singular and plural issue.