新闻— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and give one or two specific reasons/examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, and).

示例: Yes, I am interested in the news because it keeps me informed about world events and different topics. For example, I read articles about technology and international politics to stay updated.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific example of sources or habits. Use a linking phrase to explain why you use them.

示例: I usually find news online, mainly through Google News and YouTube. For example, I subscribe to BBC and a few tech channels because they provide reliable updates and short video summaries.

建议: Clarify the reason—'intervals' is unclear—use a direct topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons and link ideas. Mention what you prefer instead. Keep it to two or three sentences.

示例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because I prefer a stable, predictable work schedule. I studied computer science and enjoy programming, so I want to pursue a career in software development instead.

建议: Be concise and avoid repetition and fillers. State the main point, give a specific example of an article or topic you read, and use a linking word to show result or purpose.

示例: Yes, I read the BBC this morning, which provided updates on global events. For instance, there was an article about recent diplomatic talks that helped me understand the latest developments.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, and provide one or two specific examples of topics you discuss and why. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, such as).

示例: Yes, I often discuss the news with friends, especially topics I care about such as politics and international development. For example, we recently debated the impact of a new trade agreement and shared different perspectives.

× Yes, I am quite interested in news because from news we can get every kind of information of the whole world and we can learn about, uh, the, any type of, uh, topic.

✓ Yes, I am quite interested in the news because from the news we can get all kinds of information about the whole world and we can learn about any type of topic.

Use of articles and prepositions: 'interested in the news' requires 'the'. 'From the news' is correct with 'the'. 'Every kind of information of the whole world' is awkward: use 'all kinds of information about the whole world'. Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity.

× Usually I find news in the Internet such as Google and also I use YouTube platform for the news of global events and development of.

✓ Usually I find news on the Internet, such as Google, and I also use YouTube for news about global events and developments.

Preposition: use 'on the Internet' not 'in the Internet'. 'YouTube platform' can be shortened to 'YouTube'. Use 'news about' rather than 'news of'. 'Development of' is incomplete; use the plural noun 'developments'.

× No, I don't like to be a journalist because it doesn't give me more intervals.

✓ No, I don't want to be a journalist because it doesn't give me enough free time.

Meaning and preposition: 'don't like to be' is acceptable but 'doesn't give me more intervals' is unidiomatic. Replace with 'doesn't give me enough free time' to express lack of spare time. 'Want' is more natural when answering preference.

× Actually, I have interest on programming, that's why I studied computer science and engineering.

✓ Actually, I am interested in programming; that's why I studied computer science and engineering.

'Have interest on' is incorrect; use 'be interested in'. Also improve punctuation and connect clauses correctly.

× I quite like to do programming that.

✓ I quite like programming.

Pronoun 'that' at the end is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Use the gerund 'programming' to express the activity.

× Yes, I have read the news in this morning from BBC and it gave me the updated information about global events and, uh, the world world's information.

✓ Yes, I read the news this morning on the BBC, and it gave me updated information about global events and world affairs.

Tense and preposition: 'have read ... this morning' is awkward—simple past 'read' is normal with a specific time 'this morning'. Use 'on the BBC' not 'in'. 'the world world's information' is redundant; use 'world affairs'. 'Updated' is fine without 'the'.

× Yes, I often talk with my friends about the news which are uh, related to my interest like political and international issues and global development, global influence and also.

✓ Yes, I often talk with my friends about news that is related to my interests, such as political and international issues, global development, and global influence.

Relative clause and agreement: 'news' is a singular/uncountable noun so use 'that is' rather than 'which are'. Use 'my interests' plural, and 'such as' to introduce examples. Remove trailing 'and also' and redundant commas.