分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and clarify your points with linking words. For example, instead of 'sharing about my feelings and about my days what is somewhat taboo', say 'sharing my feelings and daily experiences was somewhat taboo in my family, so I usually kept things to myself.'

示例: To be honest, not really. I grew up in a very conservative and strict family, so sharing my feelings and daily experiences was somewhat taboo. Therefore, I usually kept things to myself most of the time.

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid informal phrases like 'and what not.' Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct verb forms such as 'advises' to 'advise.'

示例: Surprisingly, I'm very open with my friends because I know I can be myself without pretending. Moreover, it's amazing to have people who support and advise me whenever I have a problem.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Avoid repetition and clarify your points.

示例: It depends on the situation because I'm not very open to people I'm not close with. Therefore, I usually don't share personal details or talk about my struggles and challenges with them.

建议: Avoid redundancy such as 'not unfortunately not.' Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to express your ideas more effectively.

示例: Absolutely. I believe that as humans, we are open and helpful, so we try to share what we have. Sharing cars is especially important because not everyone can afford one.

× I grew up in a family that's very conservative and strict, so sharing about my feelings and about my days what is somewhat taboo in my family and I try to keep things for myself most of the time.

✓ I grew up in a family that's very conservative and strict, so sharing about my feelings and about my days is somewhat taboo in my family and I try to keep things to myself most of the time.

The phrase 'what is' is incorrect here; the correct verb form is 'is' to agree with the singular subject 'sharing'. Also, 'keep things for myself' should be 'keep things to myself' as the correct preposition is 'to' in this context.

× I grew up in a family that's very conservative and strict, so sharing about my feelings and about my days what is somewhat taboo in my family and I try to keep things for myself most of the time.

✓ I grew up in a family that's very conservative and strict, so sharing about my feelings and about my days is somewhat taboo in my family and I try to keep things to myself most of the time.

The phrase 'keep things for myself' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'keep things to myself' when referring to not sharing information or feelings.

× This is mainly because I know I can be who I really am without masking myself and it's quite surreal that to have those people who support and advises you whenever you have a problem and what not.

✓ This is mainly because I know I can be who I really am without masking myself and it's quite surreal to have those people who support and advise you whenever you have a problem and whatnot.

The phrase 'that to have' is incorrect; it should be 'to have'. Also, 'advises' should be 'advise' because the subject 'people' is plural. 'What not' should be one word 'whatnot'.

× It depends on the situation. This is because I don't. I'm not very open to people who I'm not close with. So about my personal details I don't quite share, but to them if if they don't answer and especially about my struggles and challenges in life though.

✓ It depends on the situation. This is because I don't. I'm not very open to people I'm not close with. So about my personal details, I don't quite share, especially about my struggles and challenges in life though.

The phrase 'people who I'm not close with' is better as 'people I'm not close with' for conciseness. The phrase 'but to them if if they don't answer' is unclear and seems erroneous; it was removed for clarity. Also, a comma is needed after 'personal details'.

× Absolutely. I think as a human we are very open and helpful people and we try to share what we have, especially cars which are not unfortunately not available to everyone of us.

✓ Absolutely. I think as humans we are very open and helpful people and we try to share what we have, especially cars which are unfortunately not available to every one of us.

The phrase 'as a human' should be plural 'as humans' to match 'we'. The double negative 'not unfortunately not' is incorrect; it should be 'unfortunately not'. Also, 'everyone of us' should be 'every one of us'.