分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和不完整的句子，使表达更流畅自然。

示例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They said sharing helps me become a kind and good person.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构稍显混乱，建议使用连词使句子更连贯，同时注意词汇搭配的准确性。

示例: I like to share snacks like chocolate and cake because sharing not only makes me happy but also helps build better relationships.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议明确区分不适合分享的物品，并用正确的语法表达。

示例: I think personal items like clothes or food that has already been eaten are not suitable for sharing.

建议: 回答含糊且重复，缺乏具体细节，建议直接回答问题并提供具体信息，避免口头语。

示例: Recently, I shared with my friends some difficulties I faced in my test because it was quite challenging.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，逻辑不够连贯，建议理清思路，使用连词连接句子，并避免重复。

示例: I usually share good news with my friends first because they understand me and don't judge me like family sometimes might.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和词汇使用不够准确，建议使用更自然的表达方式和正确的语法。

示例: I like to share good news about new relationships, like when someone starts dating, because I find those stories interesting.

× my parents taught me share with others

✓ my parents taught me to share with others

动词teach后面接动词时，应该用不定式to do形式，而不是直接用动词原形。这里应为'taught me to share'。

× and when I was a child, she told.

✓ and when I was a child, they told me.

前文提到的是parents，复数，不能用单数代词she，应使用they，并且动词后应有宾语。

× if you wanna want to be a good person, you need to share with others

✓ if you want to be a good person, you need to share with others

wanna是口语缩写，正式书面语中应使用want to。

× I like to share some snacks such as chocolate and cake and I think share with others not only makes me happy but also makes the greater great relationship.

✓ I like to share some snacks such as chocolate and cake, and I think sharing with others not only makes me happy but also builds better relationships.

动词share应改为动名词sharing作主语；关系名词relationship应使用复数形式relationships；形容词greater用法不当，应改为better。

× I think maybe it's some secret things like you clothes and maybe something have eaten.

✓ I think maybe some secret things like your clothes and maybe something that has been eaten.

you clothes应为your clothes；have eaten缺少主语且时态不对，应改为has been eaten。

× I had eaten and it's not really good for to share with others.

✓ I have eaten, and it's not really good to share with others.

过去完成时had eaten用法不当，应使用现在完成时have eaten；不定式前不加介词for。

× now I really, uh, have a test, uh, maybe now.

✓ now I really have a test.

句子中重复使用now和uh，简化表达更自然。

× maybe not new, not good news I always share with them.

✓ maybe not new or bad news I always share with them.

new应为news，且应使用连词or连接两个形容词。

× Because if you share something with your family, umm with your parents, they will care about you. But your friends now and don't, they don't judge with you.

✓ Because if you share something with your family, umm with your parents, they will care about you. But your friends now, they don't judge you.

句子结构混乱，去掉多余的and，judge后面不加介词with。

× I always like to share some good news with the new relationship like the someone to someone to be a boyfriend or be a girlfriend.

✓ I always like to share some good news about new relationships, like someone becoming a boyfriend or a girlfriend.

the new relationship用法不当，应为new relationships；the someone to someone表达不清，应改为someone becoming...。