分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够自然，建议注意句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更地道的表达方式。

示例: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my toys with other children. For example, when we had dumplings, they would share some with our neighbors because they believe sharing helps build good relationships.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用不准确，建议用更准确的词汇和句子结构表达分享的内容。

示例: I like to share delicious food, such as cookies, with my friends. Besides that, I also share useful knowledge, like answers to final tests or interesting news about celebrities.

建议: 回答语法错误较多，表达不够连贯，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: I think unconfirmed gossip and very personal information are not suitable to share because they might be false or cause misunderstandings.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议注意时态和词汇的准确使用，同时避免重复表达。

示例: Recently, I shared my experience of winning a competition with my friends. They were very proud of me, and sharing this made our friendship stronger.

建议: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议简化句子，明确表达原因，并注意句子完整性。

示例: I would share good news with my roommates first because we have a close relationship. We study, exercise, and eat together, and they always encourage and support me.

建议: 回答表达不清晰，语法和用词错误较多，建议使用简单明了的句子表达分享的内容和目的。

示例: I usually share news about my studies with my friends. For example, I tell them about my successful experiments or failures and give them advice based on my experiences.

× Yes, they always told me to share my toys with other kids and when we are having some dumplings they will give some to our neighbors.

✓ Yes, they always told me to share my toys with other kids, and when we were having some dumplings, they would give some to our neighbors.

这里描述的是过去的习惯行为，应该使用过去时态。'are having'应改为过去进行时'were having'，'will give'应改为过去将来时'would give'。

× They believe a good relationship is based is built based on sharing.

✓ They believe a good relationship is built on sharing.

句子中重复使用了'is based'和'is built based on'，结构混乱。应简化为'is built on'，表达清晰。

× I always show delicious foods with my friends, like some cookies or other things, or maybe some knowledge, some answers of the final Test and the news of the famous people.

✓ I always share delicious food with my friends, like some cookies or other things, or maybe some knowledge, some answers to the final test, and news about famous people.

动词'show'用错，应为'share'。'answers of the final Test'应为'answers to the final test'，'the news of the famous people'应为'news about famous people'，介词使用不当。

× I always show delicious foods with my friends, like some cookies or other things, or maybe some knowledge, some answers of the final Test and the news of the famous people.

✓ I always share delicious food with my friends, like some cookies or other things, or maybe some knowledge, some answers to the final test, and news about famous people.

'foods'通常用作不可数名词，表示食物总称，应使用单数形式'food'。

× I think some gossip sets not be confirmed is not suitable to be shared and something maybe too personal is not also not suitable to share and you will never know.

✓ I think some gossip that has not been confirmed is not suitable to be shared, and something maybe too personal is also not suitable to share because you will never know.

句子结构混乱，缺少连接词。'sets not be confirmed'应改为'that has not been confirmed'，'not also not suitable'重复否定，应改为'also not suitable'。

× Yes, I shared my experience in winning a during competition and my friends also be very proud of me.

✓ Yes, I shared my experience in winning a competition, and my friends were also very proud of me.

'be'动词应与过去时态一致，改为'were'。'in winning a during competition'中'during'多余，应删除。

× I feel our connections is more deeper.

✓ I feel our connection is deeper.

'connections'应为单数'connection'，'more deeper'是比较级和最高级重复，应只用'deeper'。

× Definitely my roommates because we have a close relationship we always study exercise and eating together.

✓ Definitely my roommates because we have a close relationship; we always study, exercise, and eat together.

句子缺少连接符号，导致结构混乱。'study exercise and eating'应改为' study, exercise, and eat'，保持动词形式一致。

× They will always encourage me and support S support me with good advice.

✓ They will always encourage me and support me with good advice.

句子中出现多余的'S support'，应删除，保持代词使用正确。

× So if I had some news I will find.

✓ So if I have some news, I will tell them.

条件句中使用过去时'had'与主句将来时'will'不匹配，应使用现在时'have'。'I will find'不完整，应补充完整表达。

× So mostly is about my study and if I had some successful experiments or a failure I will tell them and remind them don't be foolish just as me or give some advice to them to reference to as a reference.

✓ So mostly it is about my studies, and if I have some successful experiments or failures, I will tell them and remind them not to be foolish like me or give them some advice as a reference.

'about my study'应为'about my studies'，'if I had'应为'if I have'，'don't be foolish just as me'应为'not to be foolish like me'，'to reference to as a reference'表达重复，应简化。