分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答有语法错误，表达不够自然。建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答问题，并用连接词使句子连贯。例如，可以先说“是的，我的父母教我分享”，然后解释原因。

示例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because sharing helps build good relationships, especially with friends.

建议: 回答中有词汇使用错误和语法问题。建议使用正确的词汇表达意图，并用连接词使句子更流畅。可以先说喜欢分享食物，然后举例说明。

示例: I like to share food with others. For example, when I have a big cake or some cookies, I share them with my friends because it makes both them and me happy.

建议: 回答不够清晰，表达不自然。建议直接回答问题，使用正确的句子结构，并提供具体理由。

示例: I think exam answers are not suitable for sharing because it is dishonest and unfair to others.

建议: 回答中有时态和语法错误。建议使用正确的时态，句子结构清晰，并用连接词连接句子。

示例: Yes, last weekend I shared a big cake with my friends because it was my birthday. My parents bought the cake for me, and sharing it made me feel happier.

建议: 回答基本清楚，但语法和表达可以更自然。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意时态一致。

示例: The first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because I trust them a lot. They always give me useful advice when I share things with them.

建议: 回答不连贯，有语法和表达错误。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和犹豫词，使用连接词使句子流畅。

示例: I usually share good news with my friends because it makes me happy, and I want to share that happiness with them. I avoid sharing bad news because it can make people feel anxious.

× Yes, my parent teachers sharing is important for us to connect relationship with others especially for friends.

✓ Yes, my parents teach that sharing is important for us to connect relationships with others, especially with friends.

The word 'parent' should be plural 'parents' to match the plural subject. 'Teachers' should be 'teach' as a verb. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to connections with multiple people. Also, preposition 'with' is needed before 'friends'. This improves subject-verb agreement and noun number consistency.

× We should share cakes or good things with our friends that were helpful for our relationship better.

✓ We should share cakes or good things with our friends that help improve our relationships.

The phrase 'that were helpful for our relationship better' is incorrect. 'Help improve' is a better verb phrase. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match multiple friends. The preposition 'for' is not appropriate here; 'help improve' is more natural.

× I purport to share food with others.

✓ I intend to share food with others.

The word 'purport' is incorrectly used; it means 'to claim falsely'. The correct word is 'intend' to express purpose or desire.

× For example, when I have a big cake or some cookies, I will share it for with my friends.

✓ For example, when I have a big cake or some cookies, I will share them with my friends.

'Cake or some cookies' refers to plural items, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'. Also, 'for with' is incorrect; only 'with' is needed.

× That will let me let my friends feel happy as well as I'm ever happy too.

✓ That will make my friends feel happy, and I will be happy too.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Let me let my friends feel happy' is incorrect; 'make my friends feel happy' is better. 'As well as I'm ever happy too' is redundant and incorrect; 'and I will be happy too' is clearer.

× I think that must be answer.

✓ I think that must be the answer.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'answer'. Also, 'must be answer' is incomplete without 'the'.

× If you are in a exam, you should not share your answer with others.

✓ If you are in an exam, you should not share your answers with others.

'In a exam' is incorrect; it should be 'in an exam' because 'exam' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'answer' should be plural 'answers' as students usually have multiple answers.

× Yes, last weekend I share a big cake with my friends because that's my birthday.

✓ Yes, last weekend I shared a big cake with my friends because it was my birthday.

The action happened in the past, so 'share' should be past tense 'shared'. Also, 'that's my birthday' should be 'it was my birthday' to match past tense.

× My parents book a cake for me and I share my cake and my happiness with others make me feel more happy.

✓ My parents booked a cake for me, and I shared my cake and my happiness with others, which made me feel happier.

'Book' and 'share' should be in past tense 'booked' and 'shared' to match the past event. The phrase 'make me feel more happy' should be 'made me feel happier' for correct tense and comparative form.

× That must be my parents because I trust my parents very much.

✓ That must be my parents because I trust them very much.

To avoid repetition, 'my parents' should be replaced with the pronoun 'them' in the second clause.

× So if I have some good news I will share with them and they also gave me some useful advice about it.

✓ So if I have some good news, I will share it with them, and they also give me some useful advice about it.

The sentence mixes future and past tense incorrectly. 'Have' and 'will share' are present and future, so 'gave' should be 'give' to maintain tense consistency.

× I will choose some good news because umm, good news make me happy.

✓ I will choose some good news because, umm, good news makes me happy.

'Good news' is singular in meaning, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make'.

× I should. I want to share the happiness to others, make them feel happy too.

✓ I want to share the happiness with others to make them feel happy too.

The sentence 'I should.' is incomplete and unnecessary. 'Share the happiness to others' should be 'share the happiness with others'. The phrase 'make them feel happy too' should be connected properly.

× Inside of some bad news.

✓ Instead of some bad news.

'Inside of' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'instead of' to express contrast.

× The bad news will be anxious to everyone that's better, that's that's terrible.

✓ Bad news will make everyone anxious; that's worse, that's terrible.

'Bad news will be anxious to everyone' is incorrect; news cannot be anxious, people can. So 'make everyone anxious' is correct. 'That's better' should be 'that's worse' to match the negative context.