分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构，避免口头语“MMM”，使表达更流畅自然。

示例: Yes, my parents definitely taught me to share with others because it helps build stronger and healthier relationships, and it also teaches me how to cooperate effectively.

建议: 回答内容不够具体且表达混乱，建议明确具体分享的事物，避免模糊和重复，使用连贯的句子表达观点。

示例: I like to share desserts and interesting stories from my daily life, as well as my thoughts and perspectives on various topics with others.

建议: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，建议用更准确的词汇和句式表达观点，避免重复和语法错误。

示例: I think money is not suitable to share because it is very important in our daily life. Also, personal relationships like those with lovers and parents should be kept private.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议简化句子结构，清晰表达分享的内容和原因。

示例: Yes, recently I have shared my feelings about assignments and professors with my friends because they can offer different perspectives.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅，建议注意主谓一致和句子完整性，避免口头语。

示例: I would like to share good news with my mother first because she understands my feelings and keeps my secrets. I often tell her about my school life.

建议: 回答内容混乱且语法错误较多，建议明确具体分享的新闻类型，使用连贯句子表达。

示例: I usually share interesting gossip or stories about animals I see on the street with my friends because I find these daily life details fascinating.

× Yes MMM I think my parents definitely teach me need to SH share something with other because in this way I can build a stronger and healthy relationship with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

✓ Yes, MMM, I think my parents definitely taught me that I need to share something with others because in this way I can build stronger and healthier relationships with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

这里的动作发生在过去，所以动词时态应使用过去式“taught”。另外，“need to share”前应加连接词“that”，并且“other”应为复数“others”，形容词“stronger and healthy”应保持一致为“stronger and healthier”。

× Yes MMM I think my parents definitely teach me need to SH share something with other because in this way I can build a stronger and healthy relationship with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

✓ Yes, MMM, I think my parents definitely taught me that I need to share something with others because in this way I can build stronger and healthier relationships with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

“other”应为复数形式“others”，因为指的是多个人。

× Yes MMM I think my parents definitely teach me need to SH share something with other because in this way I can build a stronger and healthy relationship with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

✓ Yes, MMM, I think my parents definitely taught me that I need to share something with others because in this way I can build stronger and healthier relationships with others and also learn how to cooperate with others.

“teach”应使用过去式“taught”，因为动作发生在过去。

× MMM, I'll say something like snakes or something, desserts and also not very concrete thing.

✓ MMM, I'll say something like snakes or desserts and also not very concrete things.

“thing”应为复数形式“things”，因为前面提到了多个具体或抽象的事物。

× So I would say I like to show a lot of thing to others.

✓ So I would say I like to show a lot of things to others.

“thing”应为复数形式“things”，因为“a lot of”后面通常接复数名词。

× So I would say it's money because money is very important thing in our basic life.

✓ So I would say it's money because money is a very important thing in our basic life.

“thing”前应加不定冠词“a”，表示“一个重要的东西”。

× So and also lovers and parents, something like this.

✓ Also lovers and parents, something like this.

句子中“and”前多余，应去掉。

× I think if I share into other it's a I feel a little bit ridiculous.

✓ I think if I share with others, I would feel a little bit ridiculous.

“share into other”用法错误，应为“share with others”；“it's a I feel”结构不正确，应改为“I would feel”。

× Yes, because and student also I have a lot of assignments, so I always share my feeling about the assignment or my feeling about the professor.

✓ Yes, because as a student, I also have a lot of assignments, so I always share my feelings about the assignments or my feelings about the professor.

“feeling”应为复数“feelings”，因为表达多种感受；“assignment”应为复数“assignments”，与前文呼应。

× Something like this to my friend and I, they can give me like diverse angles about the certain things.

✓ Something like this to my friends, and they can give me diverse perspectives about certain things.

“friend and I”用法错误，应为“friends”；“the certain things”中“the”多余，应去掉。

× Umm, I'll say it's my mother because I think she's very understand my feeling and just helping me just keep a secret.

✓ Umm, I'll say it's my mother because I think she understands my feelings very well and helps me keep secrets.

“she's very understand”语法错误，应为“she understands”；“helping me just keep a secret”结构不正确，应改为“helps me keep secrets”。

× So yeah, I really want to. I really like to tell something about school in my life to my mother's.

✓ So yeah, I really want to. I really like to tell something about school and my life to my mother.

“my mother's”错误，应为“my mother”，表示“我的母亲”。

× In I would say like someone's gossip or something or or some kind of animals I observe on the roads.

✓ I would say like someone's gossip or some kind of animals I observe on the roads.

“In”多余，应去掉。

× I I obsess it with some daily life because I still sharing with them because very interesting.

✓ I am obsessed with daily life and still share with them because it's very interesting.

“obsess it with some daily life”表达错误，应为“am obsessed with daily life”；“sharing”时态错误，应为“share”；“because very interesting”缺少主语，应为“because it's very interesting”。