分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并补充具体细节。

示例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to share pencils and paper with my classmates to build good relationships.

建议: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明分享的原因。

示例: I like to share pencils and paper with my friends because they often forget to bring these items to school, so sharing helps them complete their work.

建议: 表达不清晰且有重复，语法错误较多。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并避免重复。

示例: I think expensive items like phones or headphones are not suitable to share because they can be easily lost or damaged.

建议: 回答内容重复且表达不够自然。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子说明最近分享的物品。

示例: Recently, I shared my pencil and some notes with a classmate who forgot to bring them to school.

建议: 回答未直接回应问题，内容偏离主题。建议直接回答问题并说明原因。

示例: The first person I would like to share good news with is my best friend Toya because he is very supportive and always listens to me.

建议: 回答不完整且表达混乱。建议完整表达观点，并用具体例子说明分享的新闻类型。

示例: I usually share news about video games or tell funny jokes with my friends to make them laugh during school breaks.

× Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only teach me sharing something like sharing a pencil each other or a paper to write it note down.

✓ Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only taught me to share things like sharing a pencil with each other or a paper to write notes down.

这里的动作发生在过去，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“teach”，应改为过去时态“taught”。另外，动词后面应接不定式“to share”，而不是动名词“sharing”。

× Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only teach me sharing something like sharing a pencil each other or a paper to write it note down.

✓ Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only taught me to share things like sharing a pencil with each other or a paper to write notes down.

“share”后面需要加介词“with”表示“和……分享”，原句缺少“with”，应补充。

× Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only teach me sharing something like sharing a pencil each other or a paper to write it note down.

✓ Absolutely, when I was a child my parents only taught me to share things like sharing a pencil with each other or a paper to write notes down.

“write it note down”中“it”使用不当，应去掉，改为“write notes down”。

× But right now I just think is my truth.

✓ But right now I just think it is my truth.

句子缺少主语“it”，导致语法错误，应补充。

× So I personally share some pencil or paper for my friend because he always forgetting bring a pencil or a paper or a binder for school.

✓ So I personally share some pencils or paper with my friend because he always forgets to bring a pencil or paper or a binder for school.

“pencil”应使用复数“pencils”，因为表示不止一支铅笔；“share ... for my friend”应改为“share ... with my friend”；“forgetting bring”应改为“forgets to bring”。

× So I personally share some pencil or paper for my friend because he always forgetting bring a pencil or a paper or a binder for school.

✓ So I personally share some pencils or paper with my friend because he always forgets to bring a pencil or paper or a binder for school.

主语是第三人称单数“he”，谓语动词应加-s，改为“forgets”。

× So I personally share some pencil or paper for my friend because he always forgetting bring a pencil or a paper or a binder for school.

✓ So I personally share some pencils or paper with my friend because he always forgets to bring a pencil or paper or a binder for school.

“share ... for my friend”应改为“share ... with my friend”，介词使用错误。

× So some reason I will share a pencil or paper to my friend.

✓ So for some reason I will share a pencil or paper with my friend.

“some reason”前应加介词“for”；“share ... to my friend”应改为“share ... with my friend”；“reason”前缺少介词。

× So some reason I will share a pencil or paper to my friend.

✓ So for some reason I will share a pencil or paper with my friend.

“share ... to my friend”应改为“share ... with my friend”，介词使用错误。

× So in my opinion I think it's not sellable for phone or some expensive headphone to share with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive thing like very expensive headphone or very expensive expensive phone, someone will take it and sell it.

✓ So in my opinion I think it's not suitable to share a phone or some expensive headphones with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive things like very expensive headphones or a very expensive phone, someone will take them and sell them.

“sellable”用词错误，应为“suitable”；“headphone”应为复数“headphones”；“some expensive thing”应为复数“some expensive things”；“very expensive expensive phone”重复，应删去一个“expensive”；“someone will take it and sell it”中“it”应改为复数“them”，与前文复数保持一致。

× So in my opinion I think it's not sellable for phone or some expensive headphone to share with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive thing like very expensive headphone or very expensive expensive phone, someone will take it and sell it.

✓ So in my opinion I think it's not suitable to share a phone or some expensive headphones with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive things like very expensive headphones or a very expensive phone, someone will take them and sell them.

“phone”前应加冠词“a”；“headphone”应为复数“headphones”；“thing”应为复数“things”；“it”应改为“them”，保持数的一致。

× So in my opinion I think it's not sellable for phone or some expensive headphone to share with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive thing like very expensive headphone or very expensive expensive phone, someone will take it and sell it.

✓ So in my opinion I think it's not suitable to share a phone or some expensive headphones with a friend because my mom always said if I bring some expensive things like very expensive headphones or a very expensive phone, someone will take them and sell them.

“not sellable for phone”应改为“not suitable to share a phone”，介词和表达方式错误。

× So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and a paper because pencil is not expensive and pencil everyone need a pencil to copy the notes.

✓ So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and paper because pencils are not expensive and everyone needs a pencil to copy the notes.

“a paper”应改为不可数名词“paper”；“pencil is”应改为复数“pencils are”；“pencil everyone need”应改为“everyone needs a pencil”，主谓一致。

× So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and a paper because pencil is not expensive and pencil everyone need a pencil to copy the notes.

✓ So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and paper because pencils are not expensive and everyone needs a pencil to copy the notes.

主语“everyone”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“needs”。

× So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and a paper because pencil is not expensive and pencil everyone need a pencil to copy the notes.

✓ So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and paper because pencils are not expensive and everyone needs a pencil to copy the notes.

“a paper”应改为不可数名词“paper”，不使用冠词。

× So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and a paper because pencil is not expensive and pencil everyone need a pencil to copy the notes.

✓ So I usually have my own reason for sharing a pencil and paper because pencils are not expensive and everyone needs a pencil to copy the notes.

“sharing a pencil and a paper”中“a paper”应去掉冠词，改为“paper”，因为“paper”在此为不可数名词。

× So I think it's very good and very kind to share a paper or notes.

✓ So I think it's very good and very kind to share paper or notes.

“share a paper”中“paper”通常不可数，去掉冠词更自然。

× So I usually share a pencil with my first friend named Toya.

✓ So I usually share a pencil with my best friend named Toya.

“first friend”表达不自然，通常用“best friend”表示最亲密的朋友。

× So he's very kind of me, but not kind of the teacher and other unknown friends.

✓ So he's very kind to me, but not like the teacher and other unknown friends.

“kind of me”应改为“kind to me”；“not kind of the teacher”表达不当，应改为“not like the teacher”。

× So he's very kind of me, but not kind of the teacher and other unknown friends.

✓ So he's very kind to me, but not like the teacher and other unknown friends.

“kind of me”应改为“kind to me”，介词使用错误。

× So I like to share a pencil with him.

✓ So I like to share a pencil with him.

该句无语法错误，无需修改。

× So I usually share about video games or some funny joke.

✓ So I usually share video games or some funny jokes.

“share about”用法错误，应直接用“share”；“joke”应为复数“jokes”。

× So I usually share about video games or some funny joke.

✓ So I usually share video games or some funny jokes.

“joke”应为复数“jokes”，因为表示多个笑话。

× So we always say a funny joke in a school to laugh about.

✓ So we always tell funny jokes at school to make each other laugh.

“say a funny joke in a school to laugh about”结构不正确，应改为“tell funny jokes at school to make each other laugh”。

× So we always say a funny joke in a school to laugh about.

✓ So we always tell funny jokes at school to make each other laugh.

“in a school”应改为“at school”；“say a funny joke”应改为“tell funny jokes”。

× But in my opinion I don't like a very funny joke because I would.

✓ But in my opinion I don't like very funny jokes because I would.

“a very funny joke”应改为复数“very funny jokes”；句子不完整，建议补充完整表达。