电子书— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は直接的でわかりやすいですが、表現がやや単調で、接続詞の使い方や語彙の幅を広げるとより自然で効果的になります。例えば、"because"の代わりに"since"や"as"を使ったり、"inconvenient"の代わりに"less convenient"などの表現を使うと良いでしょう。

示例: I prefer paper books since they allow me to write extensive notes directly on the pages. On the other hand, e-books are less convenient for note-taking, which makes them less suitable for my study habits.

建议: 回答は明確で内容も具体的ですが、"By using Internet service"の部分は"By using the Internet"や"Through online services"など、より自然な表現にすると良いです。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると流れが良くなります。

示例: I usually read books online when I can't find them in bookstores. Through online services, I can access books anytime and anywhere, which is very convenient for me.

建议: 回答は意見がはっきりしていますが、"So in my opinion"は冗長なので省略し、代わりに"Therefore"や"As a result"などの接続詞を使うと自然です。また、理由をもう少し具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

示例: No, I will read more paper books in the future because they allow me to discuss and share ideas with others more easily. Therefore, when I want to read something, I prefer to buy a paper book.

建议: 回答は具体的で良いですが、"which is written in English"は"written in English"で十分です。また、"Internet service"より"online services"や"the Internet"の方が自然です。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとさらに良くなります。

示例: I prefer to read English books online because they are hard to find in bookstores in Japan. For example, when I wanted to read a science book written in English, I used online services, which were very helpful for me.

建议: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、"When I read the books online"は"When I read books online"の方が自然です。また、"So I prefer to read paper books a lot"は"Therefore, I much prefer reading paper books"などにするとより効果的です。接続詞を工夫して文をつなげましょう。

示例: When I read books online, I find it difficult to concentrate. However, I can focus for up to 10 hours a day when reading paper books. Therefore, I much prefer reading paper books.

× I prefer paper books because we can write a lot of notes in my books.

✓ I prefer paper books because I can write a lot of notes in my books.

The pronoun 'we' is incorrectly used here as the speaker is referring to their own ability to write notes in their books. It should be 'I' to correctly indicate the speaker's personal action.

× By using Internet service I can get books every time, anywhere, which is convenient.

✓ By using Internet service, I can get books anytime, anywhere, which is convenient.

The phrase 'every time' is incorrect in this context; 'anytime' is the correct adverb to express 'at any time'. Also, a comma is needed after 'service' for clarity.

× For example, when I wanted to read a science book which is written in English, I used Internet service which was useful for me.

✓ For example, when I wanted to read a science book that was written in English, I used Internet service which was useful for me.

The relative pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used to refer to 'a science book'; 'that' is more appropriate for defining clauses referring to things. Also, 'was written' is correct past tense here.

× When I read the books online, I have difficulty focusing on reading.

✓ When I read books online, I have difficulty focusing on reading.

The definite article 'the' before 'books' is unnecessary here because the speaker is talking about books in general, not specific books.