电子书— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、言葉の繰り返しや「あの」「ええと」などのフィラーが多く、流暢さを損なっています。また、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、フィラーを減らし、文を簡潔にし、具体的な理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: I prefer e-books to paper books because platforms like Amazon Kindle are very convenient. They allow me to search for words and books easily, which has greatly improved my reading experience.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。より明確で自然な英語を話すために、文の構造を整理し、具体的な例を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: I usually read online in many situations. For example, I get news from apps like The New York Times and The Wall Street Journal, which makes it very convenient to search for information.

建议: 回答は質問に対して不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや言葉の詰まりが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的かつ簡潔に答え、理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: Yes, I will read more online in the future because I work as a journalist and have noticed that newspaper sales have dropped dramatically over the past decade.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、単語の複数形の誤りや繰り返しがあり、表現がやや単調です。より自然で豊かな語彙を使い、具体的な内容を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: I often gather information online, especially news on my smartphone apps. I also watch YouTube videos to learn about the latest developments in science and technology.

建议: 回答は質問に対して不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。オンラインと紙の読書の違いを明確に比較し、具体的な理由を述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: Reading online is different from paper because the internet allows me to quickly search for information, which is very useful. However, it's harder to get an overall view compared to reading a paper book.

× I prefer reading books by ebooks to uh, paper books, umm, I always use their platforms such as, uh, Amazon Kindle, uh, which is very, uh, useful and uh, uh, changed my lives a lot.

✓ I prefer reading books by e-books to paper books. I always use platforms such as Amazon Kindle, which is very useful and has changed my life a lot.

The word 'ebooks' should be hyphenated as 'e-books'. 'Lives' is plural but should be singular 'life' because it refers to the speaker's own life. Also, the sentence structure was corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I prefer reading books by ebooks to uh, paper books, umm, I always use their platforms such as, uh, Amazon Kindle, uh, which is very, uh, useful and uh, uh, changed my lives a lot.

✓ I prefer reading books by e-books to paper books. I always use platforms such as Amazon Kindle, which is very useful and has changed my life a lot.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to platforms; it should be omitted or replaced with 'these' or 'such' to correctly refer to platforms.

× I can search a lot of the words and books through the apps and which is very important.

✓ I can search for a lot of words and books through the apps, which is very important.

The verb 'search' is usually followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating what is being searched. Also, 'the words' should be 'words' without 'the' for general meaning.

× I in many cases I usually read online.

✓ In many cases, I usually read online.

The sentence had redundant subject 'I' and misplaced phrase 'in many cases'. Correct word order improves clarity.

× For example, I get a news information by a New York Times and a Wall Street Journal of apps.

✓ For example, I get news information from the New York Times and the Wall Street Journal apps.

'News information' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'By' is incorrect preposition; 'from' is correct. 'The' is needed before specific newspaper names.

× It's very convenient to search the information by using browse.

✓ It's very convenient to search for information by using a browser.

The verb 'search' requires 'for' when indicating the object. 'Browse' is a verb; the noun 'browser' is correct here.

× I am a journalist of who are working on the uh, Japanese news agency and uh so on the profits of the uh paper news, uh, the newspaper uh, has uh dropped dramatically in uh this UH-10 decades.

✓ I am a journalist who is working at a Japanese news agency. Also, the profits of paper news, the newspaper, have dropped dramatically in the last ten decades.

'Of who are' is incorrect; 'who is' is correct for singular 'journalist'. 'On' should be 'at' for workplace. 'Profits' is plural, so 'have' is used. 'UH-10 decades' is corrected to 'last ten decades'.

× Sorry, I think the paper will be.

✓ Sorry, I think paper news will decline.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'will decline' completes the future tense meaning.

× I always collect many informations through the Internet.

✓ I always collect a lot of information through the Internet.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'informations'. Use 'a lot of' to quantify uncountable nouns.

× I always read news by smartphones, apps and always watch on YouTube and get new information about the science and technology development.

✓ I always read news on smartphones and apps, and always watch YouTube to get new information about science and technology development.

'Read news by smartphones' should be 'read news on smartphones'. 'Watch on YouTube' should be 'watch YouTube'. Articles before 'science and technology development' are unnecessary.

× It seems that correcting the information by Internet is much more useful.

✓ It seems that accessing information on the Internet is much more useful.

'Correcting the information' is incorrect in this context; 'accessing information' or 'getting information' is appropriate. Also, 'by Internet' should be 'on the Internet'.

× For example, the searching function makes my habit to searching for the new information are much more better, but it's very difficult for me to see the overall.

✓ For example, the search function has made my habit of searching for new information much better, but it's very difficult for me to see the overall picture.

'The searching function' should be 'the search function'. 'Makes my habit to searching' is incorrect; correct is 'has made my habit of searching'. 'Much more better' is redundant; 'much better' suffices. 'See the overall' is incomplete; 'see the overall picture' is correct.