科学— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid unclear phrases like "How eight." Also, use correct verb tenses and improve sentence structure for clarity. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

示例: I enjoyed studying science in junior high school because it was my favorite subject. However, when I started nursing school, I found subjects like anatomy and physiology quite challenging because they are more detailed and complex.

建议: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, be consistent with pronouns and avoid informal expressions like "like for example."

示例: Yes, as a nursing student, I use my science knowledge every day to perform practical skills correctly. For instance, when I inject a patient, understanding the science behind the procedure helps me provide proper care.

建议: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain your interest clearly.

示例: I would like to learn more about pharmacology because I am interested in understanding how medications work by blocking certain nerves to cure patients. This knowledge is important for my nursing career.

建议: Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more logical and clear. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use precise vocabulary.

示例: Yes, it is important for everyone to study science because it provides new generations with ideas and a strong foundation to develop future technologies and solutions.

建议: Try to combine sentences to avoid redundancy and improve coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I love watching science TV programs because they help me understand the world better. For example, I enjoy watching the Salamat Doc programs, which make me want to watch more episodes about science.

× When I was still in junior high school, I really enjoy science.

✓ When I was still in junior high school, I really enjoyed science.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was still in junior high school'), so the verb 'enjoy' should be in the past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame.

× How eight.

✓ However.

'How eight' is a nonsensical phrase likely intended to be 'However,' which is a conjunction used to contrast ideas. Correcting it improves sentence clarity and structure.

× As a nursing student, yes I am using my science knowledge daily.

✓ As a nursing student, yes I use my science knowledge daily.

The simple present tense 'use' is more appropriate here to express habitual action rather than the present continuous 'am using'.

× I am using this to apply correctly the practical skills needed as a nursing student.

✓ I use this to correctly apply the practical skills needed as a nursing student.

The sentence structure is awkward; placing 'correctly' before 'apply' and using simple present tense improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Like for example when I am going to inject a patient, I need to know the science behind it in order to give the patient the care that you need.

✓ For example, when I am going to inject a patient, I need to know the science behind it in order to give the patient the care that they need.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used; it should be 'they' to refer back to 'the patient' in third person.

× The science subject that I like to learn about is pharmacology.

✓ The science subject that I would like to learn more about is pharmacology.

Adding 'would' and 'more' clarifies the desire to learn additional information, making the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× We have a pharmacology subject before, but I think it's not that the I want to know more about how the mechanism of actions of this medications blocked.

✓ We had a pharmacology subject before, but I think it's not enough; I want to know more about how the mechanisms of action of these medications block nerves.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correcting verb tense to past ('had'), fixing article usage, plural forms, and sentence structure improves clarity and grammar.

× Several nerves in order to cure the patient.

✓ They block several nerves in order to cure the patient.

The phrase is incomplete; adding 'They block' clarifies the subject and verb, making the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× I want to know the science be.

✓ I want to know the science behind it.

The phrase 'science be' is incorrect; 'science behind it' is the correct expression to indicate understanding the underlying science.

× This is actually our lesson in our science, technology and society right now.

✓ This is actually our lesson in science, technology, and society right now.

The repeated 'our' is redundant; removing the second 'our' improves sentence flow and correctness.

× And yes, it is very important to study science because in this way we can give our new generations knew ideas that they can work for.

✓ And yes, it is very important to study science because in this way we can give our new generations new ideas that they can work on.

'Knew' is incorrect; it should be 'new'. Also, 'work for' should be 'work on' to correctly express the idea of using ideas.

× We can give them a good foundation of science if we still continue to drive.

✓ We can give them a good foundation of science if we continue to strive.

'Drive' is incorrect in this context; 'strive' is the correct verb meaning to make great efforts, fitting the intended meaning.

× Yes, I do love watching science TV programs.

✓ Yes, I love watching science TV programs.

'Do' is unnecessary here; simple present 'I love' is sufficient and more natural.

× It makes me understand the world.

✓ It helps me understand the world.

'Helps me understand' is a more natural and grammatically correct expression than 'makes me understand' in this context.

× And it is more interesting when I watch it and it makes me want to see more episodes if it's about science, like for example the Salamat doc programs.

✓ It is more interesting when I watch it, and it makes me want to see more episodes if they are about science, like, for example, the Salamat Doc programs.

The sentence is run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Adding commas and correcting 'it's' to 'they are' for plural 'episodes' improves clarity and grammar.