网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简洁明了地直接回答问题，并用正确的时态和句式表达时间点。

示例: I started using the internet when I was in high school. I mainly used it on my phone to look up information and watch videos.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议使用完整句子并避免重复，同时使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: I go online every day because I need to check information and send messages.

建议: 回答不够具体且表达混乱，建议直接描述具体时间或情境，并用连贯的句子表达感受。

示例: Yes, I remember once when my parents didn't allow me to use the internet for a day. I felt uncomfortable and stressed because I couldn't send messages to my friends.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地说明原因，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online because my major is environmental science. I need to research information and collect data to build my electric model.

建议: 回答不连贯且含糊，建议用完整句子清楚表达没有网络时的替代方案和兴趣爱好。

示例: If I didn't have the internet, I would go to the library to find information. Also, since I like sports, I would spend more time playing outside.

× Well if I was wrong it's in my high school because I I guess by for some more by phone and I already told to check some information and. Undertake some videos.

✓ Well, if I am not wrong, it was in my high school because I guess I used my phone to check some information and watch some videos.

这里需要使用过去时态，因为说话者描述的是过去的经历。原句中时态混乱，且表达不清晰。建议使用过去时态的动词形式，如"was"和"used"，并调整句子结构使其更通顺。

× To be honest I every day because I need to check information or send a message. So I I need your Internet every days. This, yeah.

✓ To be honest, I go online every day because I need to check information or send messages. So I need the Internet every day.

原句缺少动词，导致句子不完整。"I every day"缺少动词"go online"。另外，"every days"应为单数形式"every day"。需要使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作。

× To be honest, I don't forget. Uh, sometime I don't have allowed me to use the Internet 'cause if I if, if you don't allow me to be your Internet, I feel so uncomfortable and stressed because I don't send a message for.

✓ To be honest, I don't forget. Sometimes I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because if I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, I felt so uncomfortable and stressed because I couldn't send messages.

描述过去的情况时应使用过去时态，如"wasn't allowed"和"felt"。原句中时态混用且表达不完整，需调整为过去时态并补全句子。

× Yeah, ask him too much time on it 'cause my my major is environment it is I need to make electric model and I need to check some information and get some date to make my model so. I spend so much time to in online.

✓ Yeah, I spend too much time on it because my major is environmental science. I need to make an electric model and check some information and get some data to make my model, so I spend a lot of time online.

原句中时态和语法混乱，"ask him"应为"I spend"，"environment"应为"environmental science"，"date"应为"data"。需要使用一般现在时描述现在的情况，并调整句子结构。

× If without the Internet, I. If I want to check something information I need to. Go to the library and if I fail Borean at I don't know, say videos, I I want to sparse because I really like sport. Yeah.

✓ If there were no Internet, I would need to go to the library to check some information. If I failed to find videos, I would want to exercise because I really like sports.

原句句子结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，且表达不完整。需要使用虚拟语气表达假设情况，调整句子结构使其完整通顺。