网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with a clear time reference and avoid irrelevant details. Use simple, correct sentences to express when you started using the internet.

示例: I started using the internet when I was about five or six years old. I remember it was around the time when smartphones like the iPhone 5 were becoming popular.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Provide a concise answer directly addressing the question, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I go online every day because the internet is an essential part of my daily life. For example, I use it for studying, working, and staying connected with friends.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear example of a time you were not allowed to use the internet, and explain how you felt or what you did instead, using correct grammar and linking words.

示例: Yes, I remember once when I visited a temple, I was not allowed to use the internet. It was a good opportunity to disconnect and enjoy the peaceful natural surroundings.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: I think I do spend quite a lot of time online, but mostly for work and study. However, I try to avoid spending too much time on social media to keep a healthy balance.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Give a direct response about activities you would do without the internet, and provide specific examples with proper sentence structure.

示例: Without the internet, I would spend more time playing basketball, which is my passion. I might also go out to meet friends or visit cultural places.

× I started using Internet when I very young, around everything is five to six years old and a person's worries about phone I think is the iPhone 5 or 6.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was very young, around five to six years old, and I think the phone was the iPhone 5 or 6.

The sentence lacks the past tense verb 'was' after 'I' to indicate the time when the action happened. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'everything is five to six years old' is incorrect and should be 'around five to six years old'. The phrase 'a person's worries about phone' is unclear and corrected to 'I think the phone was the iPhone 5 or 6' to make sense in context.

× Right now I think it's every day in the like the digital world and me, like a digital native could see and use the network and Internet every single day.

✓ Right now, I think I go online every day in the digital world, and as a digital native, I can see and use the network and the Internet every single day.

The original sentence has missing subjects and incorrect verb forms. 'It's every day' is unclear; it should be 'I go online every day'. 'Me, like a digital native could see' is ungrammatical; it should be 'as a digital native, I can see'. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× From there, like a life daily works, it was a study in work.

✓ From there, like daily life, it involves studying and working.

The phrase 'like a life daily works' is ungrammatical and unclear; it should be 'like daily life'. 'It was a study in work' is incorrect tense and structure; it should be 'it involves studying and working' to express habitual actions.

× I think when I have a short trip into the temple language I have to. I I can get out the Internet work to immerse yourself into the like natural.

✓ I think when I had a short trip to the temple, I had to get off the Internet to immerse myself in nature.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I have' should be 'I had' to match past events. 'Get out the Internet work' is incorrect; it should be 'get off the Internet'. 'Yourself' should be 'myself' to match the subject. 'Into the like natural' is ungrammatical; it should be 'in nature'.

× So maybe it for me it not quite hard when I don't do Internet because when I tried so I yeah I.

✓ So maybe for me, it is not quite hard when I don't use the Internet because I have tried it.

The sentence has missing verbs and incorrect tense usage. 'It for me it not quite hard' should be 'it is not quite hard'. 'When I don't do Internet' should be 'when I don't use the Internet'. 'Because when I tried so I yeah I' is incomplete and corrected to 'because I have tried it'.

× I think is true but in part and use Internet a lot.

✓ I think it is true that I use the Internet a lot.

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' after 'I think'. 'In part and use Internet a lot' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'that I use the Internet a lot' to express agreement.

× I agree with that but I know surfing the Internet a lot and you Internet for working for studying for like watching or relaxing but I not surfing in the social media.

✓ I agree with that, but I know I surf the Internet a lot and use it for working, studying, watching, or relaxing, but I do not surf social media.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and missing auxiliary verbs. 'I know surfing' should be 'I know I surf'. 'You Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'I use it'. 'I not surfing' should be 'I do not surf'. Also, 'in the social media' should be 'social media' without 'in the'.

× Playing basketball 1 so my passion.

✓ Playing basketball is my passion.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' to connect the subject and complement. '1' is likely a typo and removed.

× Please call or maybe go to the humanistic and so on.

✓ Please call or maybe go to a cultural centre and so on.

'Humanistic' is an adjective and incorrectly used as a noun. It is replaced with 'a cultural centre' to make sense. Also, 'Please call' is unclear; it might be 'play ball' or 'play basketball' but kept as 'Please call' as per original. The preposition 'to' is correct before 'a cultural centre'.