网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use the past tense correctly and clarify the timeline. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for naturalness. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because of the coronavirus pandemic. Since we had to attend online classes, I was forced to use the internet regularly, which was quite new for me at the time.

建议: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains filler words. Try to organise your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid repetition and improve grammar for clarity.

示例: I don't go online very often because I need to focus on my studies. However, during my free time, I usually go online to chat with my friends and stay connected.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is unclear. Use correct verb forms and sentence structure. Also, avoid unnecessary details and focus on answering the question directly with supporting details.

示例: Yes, I remember when I was about five or six years old, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet. Instead, I spent time playing with my friends and my sister.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, complete your sentences and avoid grammatical errors.

示例: I don't think I spend too much time online, but I believe I should manage my time better. For example, instead of just scrolling or chatting with friends, I could read a book or go outside during my free time.

建议: Your answer shows your opinion but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use conditional sentences correctly and organise your ideas logically with linking words.

示例: Without the internet, I would find it very difficult to complete my work because I rely on it for most tasks. If I didn't have access to the internet, I think I would struggle to maintain my daily routine.

× Actually I start using Internet since I was in a primary school because of the coronavirus.

✓ Actually I started using the Internet when I was in primary school because of the coronavirus.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started'. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. 'Since' is better replaced by 'when' to indicate the time in the past.

× Actually I start using Internet since I was in a primary school because of the coronavirus.

✓ Actually I started using the Internet when I was in primary school because of the coronavirus.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'a primary school' is better as 'primary school' without the article in this context.

× We should do online classes so we enforce to use the Internet and it was quiet.

✓ We had to do online classes so we were forced to use the Internet and it was quiet.

The phrase 'enforce to use' is incorrect; the correct form is 'were forced to use'. Also, 'online classes' is correct without 'the' here, but 'the Internet' requires the definite article. 'Quiet' is likely a typo for 'quiet' or 'quite' but context is unclear.

× Uh, actually frequently I can't go online, uh, very well because I had to study more and uh, when I have, when I am on my leisure time, I go online and talk with my friend, chat with my friends, yes.

✓ Uh, actually, I can't go online very often because I have to study more, and when I have leisure time, I go online and talk with my friends, chat with my friends, yes.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Can't go online' is present tense, so 'had to study' should be 'have to study' to maintain consistency. 'Frequently' is better placed after 'actually' or replaced with 'very often'. 'When I am on my leisure time' is incorrect; it should be 'when I have leisure time'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'chat with my friends'.

× When I was like 4-5, six and seven years old and my mother and doesn't allowed me to use Internet and I just have to play with my friends, with my sister and I'm not you.

✓ When I was about 4, 5, 6, and 7 years old, my mother didn't allow me to use the Internet and I just had to play with my friends and my sister, and I wasn't allowed to use it.

The sentence has pronoun and verb agreement errors. 'My mother and doesn't allowed' is incorrect; it should be 'my mother didn't allow'. 'Use Internet' requires 'the Internet'. 'I'm not you' is unclear and likely incorrect; it is replaced with 'I wasn't allowed to use it' for clarity.

× When I was like 4-5, six and seven years old and my mother and doesn't allowed me to use Internet and I just have to play with my friends, with my sister and I'm not you.

✓ When I was about 4, 5, 6, and 7 years old, my mother didn't allow me to use the Internet and I just had to play with my friends and my sister, and I wasn't allowed to use it.

The verb 'allowed' should be in past tense 'didn't allow' with auxiliary 'did'. 'Have to' should be 'had to' to match past tense context.

× I'm not you.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use it.

The phrase 'I'm not you' is unclear and does not fit the context. It is corrected to 'I wasn't allowed to use it' to convey the intended meaning.

× Not much, but I think uh, I should like, umm, watch my time and in my leisure time instead of scrolling and uh, like chat, chatting with my friends, uh, I should read a book, go went outside or.

✓ Not much, but I think I should watch my time and in my leisure time, instead of scrolling and chatting with my friends, I should read a book or go outside.

The phrase 'go went outside' is incorrect; 'go' is correct. 'Like chat, chatting' is redundant; 'chatting' suffices. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct quantifier and verb usage.

× I would definitely go insane because all the work I do combined with Internet and if I hadn't Internet, I would say I don't have anything to do and I'm not able to do my ordinary routine.

✓ I would definitely go insane because all the work I do is combined with the Internet, and if I didn't have the Internet, I would say I wouldn't have anything to do and wouldn't be able to do my ordinary routine.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'If I hadn't Internet' should be 'if I didn't have the Internet'. 'I don't have' should be 'I wouldn't have' to match the conditional mood. 'I'm not able' should be 'wouldn't be able' for consistency.