语言— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 答案应更清晰、有条理并修正语法与词序。说明三种语言时先列举再补充背景，避免含糊（例如“my mother tongue which is weaker Mandarin and English”结构混乱）。可以用连词来衔接信息并用正确时态。

示例: I can speak three languages: my mother tongue (Cantonese), Mandarin and English. I began learning Mandarin in elementary school, and I started studying English when I entered university.

建议: 回答要简洁且语法正确，避免冗长和重复。使用连接词（for example, because, however）并把动词形式改为正确的非词组形式（e.g. 'continue to learn'或'keep learning'）。可以给具体原因或举例说明学习难点。

示例: Yes, I think it can be difficult because it requires persistence and regular practice. For example, many people start using online resources but give up after a few weeks, so they never make real progress.

建议: 注意国家/语言名称和词性（应为 'German' 或 'German language'，不是 'Germany'）。句子要更自然，用连词表达原因与结果，并避免多余副词（如 'furthermore'）堆砌。提供学习计划细节会更好。

示例: Yes, I plan to learn German soon because I have made some German friends and I am eager to speak with them in their language. I think this will help improve our friendship and make conversations more natural.

建议: 回答结构良好，但可更自然地表达并补充具体例子。避免重复 'learn' 过多，使用替换词并用连接词明确逻辑（initially, later, for example）。给出具体信息来源或用途会更具体。

示例: I started learning English as a hobby, but later I realized its practical benefits. For example, English is an international language and it allows me to access academic articles, news and online courses that aren’t available in my native language.

× Well currently I can speak three different languages, my mother tongue which is weaker Mandarin and English.

✓ Well, currently I can speak three different languages: my mother tongue, which is weaker, Mandarin, and English.

句子中列举三种语言时缺少清晰的标点和并列结构。应使用冒号或逗号并用插入语“which is weaker”用逗号隔开，以便表达清晰。建议在列举项之间使用逗号，并在“which is weaker”前后加逗号，或重写为两个句子以提高可读性。

× I started to learn Mandarin when I was in elementary school and I started learning English after got into university.

✓ I started to learn Mandarin when I was in elementary school, and I started learning English after I got into university.

在“after got into university”中缺少主语“I”，造成不完整的从句，属于过去时态句子中省略主语问题。应在从句中加上主语并保持动词过去式“got”。建议写成“after I got into university”。

× Yes, without a doubt the difficulty is in if you have resilience and strength to continue learn a language for a longer period of time.

✓ Yes, without a doubt, the difficulty is whether you have the resilience and strength to continue learning a language for a long period of time.

句中用法错误：'is in if' 不符合英语表达，应使用 whether 引导名词性从句；动词“learn”做动名词时应为“learning”；“for a longer period of time”可简化为“for a long period of time”。建议使用“whether”并将动词改为动名词形式。

× And most of people couldn't learn a language even though there is lots of online resources is because they cannot stick with it.

✓ And most people couldn't learn a language, even though there are lots of online resources, because they cannot stick with it.

“most of people”应为“most people”；“there is lots of online resources”主谓不一致且缺少复数动词，应为“there are lots of online resources”；句子多余的“is”导致结构错误。建议去掉“of”，把“is”改为“are”，并用逗号分隔让句子更清晰。

× Yes, I am planning to learn Germany soon as I made some friends from German and I really eager to speak with them in their mother tongue.

✓ Yes, I am planning to learn German soon, as I have made some friends from Germany and I really am eager to speak with them in their mother tongue.

错误包括国家名和语言名混淆：“learn Germany”应为“learn German”；“friends from German”应为“friends from Germany”；时态应与计划相匹配，建议用现在完成时“have made”表示已结识朋友；“I really eager”缺少系动词，应为“I am really eager”。

× I believe this can help us to strengthen our relationship furthermore.

✓ I believe this can help us strengthen our relationship further.

“help us to strengthen”中的不定式可以省略“to”更自然；“furthermore”作为句内连接词常放句首或句末，此处用“further”作程度副词更合适。建议使用“help us strengthen”并用“further”表示“进一步”。

× Initially I started learning English as a hobby, but later, the more I learned, the more advantages I found out about English.

✓ Initially I started learning English as a hobby, but later, the more I learned, the more advantages I discovered about English.

动词短语“found out about”在这里不太自然，改为“discovered”更符合表达“发现（优点）”的用法；此外时态保持过去时“learned/discovered”。建议使用“discovered”以使句子更地道。

× Firstly, it's a worldwide language.

✓ Firstly, it's a worldwide language.

该句语法正确，时态和表达恰当，因此无需修改。

× Secondly, I can get access to lots of information and knowledge by learning English.

✓ Secondly, I can access a lot of information and knowledge by learning English.

短语“get access to”虽可用但更简洁自然的表达是“access”；“lots of”在正式表达中可改为“a lot of”；建议使用更简洁的动词“access”。