语言— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and correct grammar in the topic sentence, avoid repetitions, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "however" or "although") to make contrasts clear.

示例: I can speak Thai and English. Although I grew up in a Chinese-Thai family, I never learned to speak Chinese; I attempted to study it several times but gave up because remembering the characters was difficult.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitations and repetition, and finish with a concise reason and example. Use a linking word such as "because" to connect cause and effect.

示例: Yes, I think learning a new language is difficult, especially for adults, because the brain becomes less flexible with age. For instance, when I tried to learn Chinese as an adult I found memorizing characters much harder than I expected.

建议: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer first, then add one specific condition or example. Avoid unclear phrases and correct vocabulary (e.g. "IELTS"), and use linking words like "but" or "however."

示例: Probably not in the near future because I need to prepare for the IELTS exam. However, if I had more free time and money later on, I would consider taking language classes or using an app to learn another language.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I learn English because..."). Avoid vague or awkward expressions ("conqueror's language"); use precise vocabulary and concise reasons with an example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

示例: I learn English because it is widely used internationally and gives access to information online. For example, many academic articles and tutorials are in English, so knowing the language lets me access more learning resources.

× Uh, there are two languages I can speak is Thai and English.

✓ I can speak two languages: Thai and English.

The original sentence has redundant structure 'there are ... is' which mixes existential 'there are' with a subject-predicate clause, causing sentence structure error. Use a clear subject-verb order: 'I can speak two languages' and list the languages. Use a colon or 'which are' to introduce the list.

× I was born in Thailand and raised by a third generation of Chinese immigrant in Thailand.

✓ I was born in Thailand and raised by a third-generation Chinese immigrant in Thailand.

The phrase 'a third generation of Chinese immigrant' is incorrect. Use the compound adjective 'third-generation' with a hyphen and place the article before the noun phrase: 'a third-generation Chinese immigrant.' This correctly modifies 'immigrant.'

× Interestingly, I can't speak Chinese, like not at all.

✓ Interestingly, I can't speak Chinese at all.

The phrase 'like not at all' is informal and redundant. 'At all' is the correct adverbial phrase to emphasize inability. Keep formal test responses concise and grammatically standard.

× I've tried to learn it about 3 or 4 times but I give it up halfway through and there are so many characters to remember.

✓ I've tried to learn it about three or four times, but I gave up halfway through because there are so many characters to remember.

Mixed tenses: 'I've tried' (present perfect) is fine, but 'I give it up' is present simple; because the attempts are completed, use past simple 'gave up.' Also write numbers in words in formal speech and join clauses with 'because' to show reason.

× Very much so, especially if you haven't learned it at a young age.

✓ Yes, very much so, especially if you didn't learn it at a young age.

The conditional refers to a past time (being young), so 'haven't learned' (present perfect) is awkward. Use simple past 'didn't learn' to match the time reference.

× Umm. As you getting older your brain umm tends to become more stagnant and and a bit slower to absorb new information.

✓ As you get older, your brain tends to become more stagnant and a bit slower at absorbing new information.

'As you getting older' lacks the correct verb form; use base verb 'get' after 'as you.' Also change 'slower to absorb' to 'slower at absorbing' for correct collocation with the -ing form.

× And that's why I think it's a better idea to just teach umm second adult languages to your.

✓ And that's why I think it's a better idea to teach yourself a second language as an adult.

The original has incorrect pronoun 'to your' (incomplete and wrong form) and awkward word order. Use the reflexive pronoun 'yourself' and correct word order: 'teach yourself a second language as an adult.' This clarifies the subject and object.

× Umm, maybe not, I don't have enough time right now because I have to prepare for aisles, right?

✓ Maybe not. I don't have enough time right now because I have to prepare for aisles, right?

This sentence mainly needs punctuation to separate ideas. If 'aisles' was intended as 'IELTS' (exam), correct the noun; modal verb usage is fine. If referring to exams, replace 'aisles' with 'IELTS.'

× Because I'm speaking with it right now.

✓ Because I'm studying for it right now.

Fragment: 'Because' clause cannot stand alone. Also 'speaking with it' is incorrect; use 'studying for it' (preparation for the exam). Combine with the previous sentence or make it a full sentence starting without 'Because.'

× But after this, if I had a lot of free time and have some free money they can spend on anything, then probably I will consider learning a new language.

✓ But after this, if I had a lot of free time and some extra money to spend, I would probably consider learning a new language.

Mixed conditionals/tenses: 'if I had' (past subjunctive) should pair with 'would' not 'will.' Also 'have some free money they can spend on anything' has wrong pronoun 'they' and awkward phrasing. Use 'some extra money to spend.'

× What is kind of compulsory, right? English is a conqueror's language that got used worldwide by so many countries.

✓ It's kind of compulsory, right? English is a lingua franca that is used worldwide by many countries.

'What is' is incorrect; use 'It's.' 'Conqueror's language' is awkward and historically loaded; 'lingua franca' or 'a global language' is more appropriate. Use passive 'is used' rather than 'got used.'

× And so if you can master English, you can tap in this wealth of knowledge from the Internet.

✓ And so if you can master English, you can tap into this wealth of knowledge on the Internet.

The correct phrasal verb is 'tap into' (not 'tap in'), and use 'on the Internet' or 'online' rather than 'from the Internet' for natural collocation.

× Like comparing the depth and worth of knowledge in time.

✓ For example, you can access a greater depth and breadth of knowledge over time.

Original fragment is unclear and incomplete. 'Comparing the depth and worth of knowledge in time' is ungrammatical. Provide a full clause: 'you can access a greater depth and breadth of knowledge over time' to convey meaning clearly.

× And English is so different.

✓ And English is so widespread and influential.

The original short sentence is vague and doesn't connect to previous ideas. Replace with a clearer statement that explains in what way English differs or matters, such as being widespread and influential.