生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and correcting grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

示例: I usually don't make a big deal out of my birthday because it reminds me that I'm getting older. However, sometimes I go out to have dinner with my friends to celebrate in a simple way.

建议: Improve your answer by using past tense consistently and adding linking words to make the story flow better. Also, be more specific about the experience to enrich your response.

示例: When I was young, my mom often bought me a cake for my birthday. My favorite was tiramisu, and I remember one time she bought one to share with my classmates, which made the day very special.

建议: Make your answer clearer by starting with a direct response and then explaining your feelings. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar errors for better clarity.

示例: I don't think it's very important to celebrate my birthday. Since I feel uncomfortable being the center of attention, I prefer to spend a relaxing day with my friends and family instead of having a big, formal celebration.

建议: Try to answer the question directly even if you are not very familiar with the topic. You can express your limited knowledge politely and add some general information to show your effort.

示例: I'm not very familiar with Chinese culture since I'm Taiwanese, so it's hard for me to say whose birthday is the most important in China. However, I believe that celebrating elders' birthdays is quite significant in many Chinese families.

× I know it make me feel like I'm one year older and I just don't really want to celebrate about that.

✓ I know it makes me feel like I'm one year older and I just don't really want to celebrate that.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'celebrate about that' is incorrect; 'celebrate' does not require the preposition 'about'.

× But sometimes I will go out and having dinner with my friends.

✓ But sometimes I will go out and have dinner with my friends.

After the modal verb 'will', the base form of the verb 'have' should be used, not the '-ing' form 'having'.

× So I remember one time that my mom bought a tiramisu for me as birthday gift and give it to share it with my classmate.

✓ So I remember one time that my mom bought a tiramisu for me as a birthday gift and gave it to share with my classmates.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' to match the past tense context. Also, 'birthday gift' needs the article 'a'. 'Share it with my classmate' is better as 'share with my classmates' for clarity and plural consistency.

× Not really, I often feel uncomfortable being in the centre of attention so I would just want to hang out with my friends and having dinner with my family and just having a normal but relaxing day and rather than make it really big and formal celebration.

✓ Not really, I often feel uncomfortable being in the centre of attention so I would just want to hang out with my friends and have dinner with my family and just have a normal but relaxing day rather than make it a really big and formal celebration.

After 'would just want to', the base form of the verb should be used ('have' instead of 'having'). Also, 'make it really big and formal celebration' needs the article 'a' before 'really big and formal celebration'.

× Well, in China, I don't really know, 'cause I'm not too familiar with Chinese culture because I don't know, we are.

✓ Well, in China, I don't really know, 'cause I'm not too familiar with Chinese culture because I don't know, we aren't.

The pronoun 'we are' is incomplete and unclear in this context. It should be 'we aren't' to express negation properly. However, the sentence is somewhat fragmented and could be rephrased for clarity.