生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答表达不够自然，语法和用词有误，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更流畅。

示例: I usually send messages to my friends inviting them to my birthday party. We sing, dance, and sometimes play the piano together.

建议: 回答中时态混用，表达不清晰，缺少连贯性。建议使用过去时，简洁明了地描述过去的活动，并使用连接词。

示例: When I was young, I did many things on my birthday. For example, I sometimes played the piano, listened to songs like Justin Bieber's 'Baby', and went swimming with my friends.

建议: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，使用正确的句子结构，并说明原因。

示例: I think celebrating my birthday is important because I can eat birthday cake and receive best wishes from my friends and parents.

建议: 回答较为简单，重复使用词语，缺少连贯性。建议使用更丰富的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of close family members, such as my parents, brother, and sister-in-law, because family is very important to me.

× I usually send a message to my friends and want there to come my birthday party and we will sing dancing and play piano.

✓ I usually send a message to my friends and want them to come to my birthday party, and we will sing, dance, and play piano.

这里'dancing'用法错误，应该用动词原形'dance'，因为前面是并列动词结构。'want there to come my birthday party'表达不正确，应该用'want them to come to my birthday party'。动词后面接动词时，非进行时态应使用动词原形。

× I do a lot of thing in my birthday.

✓ I did a lot of things on my birthday.

句子描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去式'did'。'thing'应为复数形式'things'。介词'on'用于表示具体日期。

× I sometimes want to play piano, for example, like Xiao Bong, and sometimes we're seeing like Justin Bieber song Baby, and sometimes we were shouting and get out to swimming.

✓ I sometimes want to play the piano, for example, like Xiao Bong, and sometimes we watch songs like Justin Bieber's 'Baby', and sometimes we shout and go out swimming.

'want to play piano'中应加定冠词'the'。'we're seeing'时态和表达不当，改为一般现在时'we watch'更合适。'get out to swimming'表达错误，应为'go out swimming'。动词形式和时态需与语境一致。

× I think is eating breast cake and have a best wishes from my friends and parents and.

✓ I think it is eating birthday cake and having best wishes from my friends and parents.

'breast cake'应为'birthday cake'，是词汇错误。'have a best wishes'中'wishes'为复数，前面不应加不定冠词'a'。句子缺少主语，需加'it'。

× It depends on the people like my parents and my brother and sister-in-law because they are, they are my family people. So it's the most important to celebrate.

✓ It depends on people like my parents, my brother, and sister-in-law because they are my family. So their birthdays are the most important to celebrate.

'the people like'中'the'不必要，改为'people like'更自然。'they are my family people'表达不准确，改为'they are my family'。最后一句缺少主语，需明确指代'birthdays'。