生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'have my birthday' nên là 'celebrate my birthday'. Bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family or friends. We often go to a small, cozy Chinese restaurant, enjoy a meal together, and then cut a cake to celebrate.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ như 'When I work when I was a kid' không đúng, nên là 'When I was a kid'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: When I was a kid, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family and friends. We played many games and enjoyed fun activities together. It was always a cozy and happy time.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp như 'express my latitude' và 'who is born me'. Bạn nên dùng từ đơn giản, chính xác và câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn.

示例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it allows me to show my gratitude to my mother who gave birth to me. Also, I enjoy having a small party with my family.

建议: Bạn nên dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'parents' birthdays' thay vì 'parents birthday'. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

示例: In China, I think parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because we can organize parties for them and enjoy special meals together.

× Like we have a small cozy and warm body in a small restaurant like Chinese restaurants and also cut a cake and.

✓ Like we have a small, cozy, and warm party in a small restaurant like Chinese restaurants and also cut a cake.

The word 'body' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'party' or 'gathering'. Also, adjectives describing a noun should be separated by commas for clarity. The sentence lacked a proper noun after the adjectives, causing confusion.

× When I work when I was a kid, I usually took my birthday with my friends or my family because I wanted to have cozy ambient with my friends and also played a lot of games and activities in my birthday.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually spent my birthday with my friends or my family because I wanted to have a cozy atmosphere with my friends and also played a lot of games and activities on my birthday.

The phrase 'When I work when I was a kid' is incorrect; 'work' should be 'was'. 'Took my birthday' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'spent'. 'Cozy ambient' should be 'cozy atmosphere'. Also, 'in my birthday' should be 'on my birthday' because we use 'on' with days and dates.

× Also I can wish a lot of things.

✓ Also, I can make a lot of wishes.

The verb 'wish' is usually followed by 'for' or used as a noun. Saying 'wish a lot of things' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'make a lot of wishes' or 'wish for many things'.

× Yes, I think it is so crucial for me to celebrate my birthday because it is not the occasion that I celebrate some things or celebrate an event. But I can express my latitude to my mother who is born me in the past and also I can celebrate a small party with my family.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday because it is not just an occasion to celebrate something or an event. But I can express my gratitude to my mother who gave birth to me in the past and also celebrate a small party with my family.

The phrase 'express my latitude' is incorrect; the intended word is 'gratitude'. Also, 'who is born me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'who gave birth to me'. These errors are due to incorrect pronoun and verb usage.

× I think in China the parents birthday can be the most important to celebrate because we can organize the party for our parents and also we can eat small meals too.

✓ I think in China, the parents' birthdays can be the most important to celebrate because we can organize parties for our parents and also eat small meals.

'Parents birthday' should be plural possessive 'parents' birthdays' because it refers to birthdays of multiple parents. Also, 'the party' should be plural 'parties' to match the plural subject. 'Eat small meals too' is acceptable but can be simplified.