生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "I will I will just have a little a party with my families", bạn có thể nói "I usually have a small party with my family if my birthday falls on a weekday."

示例: I usually have a small party with my family if my birthday falls on a weekday. However, if it is on the weekend, I like to organize a big party and invite all my friends and relatives.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên mạch lạc và có liên kết giữa các ý. Ví dụ, dùng từ nối như "because" hoặc "so" để làm rõ lý do hoặc kết quả.

示例: When I was 10 years old, I tended to invite as many friends as possible to my birthday party because I enjoyed spending time with them. We had lots of snacks that my mom bought for us, so it was really fun and memorable.

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "a bit" khi muốn nhấn mạnh. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và có liên kết hợp lý giữa các phần.

示例: Yes, I think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because it is a special day in my life. It gives me a chance to reflect on the past year and enjoy time with my loved ones.

建议: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc và có cấu trúc rõ ràng. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "born and raised", bạn có thể nói "who gave us life and raised us".

示例: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are our parents' because they gave us life and raised us. Celebrating their birthdays is a way to show respect and appreciation.

× It depends on what day is it.

✓ It depends on what day it is.

In English, indirect questions follow the subject-verb order, not the question word order. 'What day is it' is a direct question, but in this sentence, it should be an indirect question, so the correct order is 'what day it is'.

× I will just have a little a party with my families.

✓ I will just have a little party with my family.

'Family' is usually treated as a singular collective noun when referring to one's relatives. 'Families' is plural and not appropriate here. Also, 'a little a party' is incorrect; it should be 'a little party'.

× But if it's in on the weekend I can prepare a large parties to invite everyone to call.

✓ But if it's on the weekend, I can prepare a large party to invite everyone to call.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'on the weekend'. Also, 'a large parties' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'parties' is plural; it should be 'a large party'.

× When I was a child, I have 10, I had tendencies to invite as many friends as I got to my party.

✓ When I was a child, I was 10, and I tended to invite as many friends as I could to my party.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past context. 'Have 10' should be 'was 10' to indicate age in the past. 'Had tendencies' is awkward; 'tended' is better. 'Got' should be 'could' to express ability.

× And I will enjoy it with all my friends, with all the snacks that my mom have bought for us.

✓ And I enjoyed it with all my friends, with all the snacks that my mom had bought for us.

The sentence refers to a past event, so past tense 'enjoyed' and past perfect 'had bought' are appropriate. 'Mom have bought' is incorrect; 'mom had bought' is correct.

× It's really fun and yeah, it's so memorable.

✓ It's really fun and, yeah, it's so memorable.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no singular/plural issue here. Minor punctuation added for clarity.

× Definitely a bit, yes, for me because it is the most special days of my life and I think that that is the day that is like necessary to be celebrate.

✓ Definitely a bit, yes, for me because it is the most special day of my life and I think that that is the day that is necessary to be celebrated.

'Days' should be singular 'day' because it refers to one birthday. 'To be celebrate' is incorrect; the passive form requires past participle 'celebrated'.

× So yeah, definitely I need to celebrate it to me.

✓ So yeah, definitely I need to celebrate it for me.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'for me' is the correct phrase to express the reason or benefit.

× I think it is our parents since, uh, they are the one who, uh, raised, born and raised.

✓ I think it is our parents since, uh, they are the ones who, uh, were born and raised us.

'They are the one' should be 'they are the ones' to agree in number. Also, 'raised, born and raised' is redundant and incorrectly ordered; 'were born and raised us' is still awkward. Better: 'who raised us and whom we were born to' or 'who raised us'.

× So it is very important and to celebrate their birthday to show our respect and appreciate.

✓ So it is very important to celebrate their birthday to show our respect and appreciation.

'And to celebrate' should be connected properly; 'and' is unnecessary here. 'Appreciate' is a verb; the noun 'appreciation' is needed to match 'respect'.