生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using correct verb tenses and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to connect your sentences smoothly.

示例: On my birthday, I usually stay at home and have dinner with my family. We enjoy the meal together, and I love spending quality time with them.

建议: Try to use past tense consistently when talking about past events. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy.

示例: When I was young, I liked to celebrate my birthday by cutting a cake and throwing a big party with my friends and family.

建议: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, express feelings more naturally.

示例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because spending time with my family makes me feel warm, loved, and valued.

建议: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by using plural forms correctly and linking ideas smoothly. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to respect and family.

示例: In China, I believe parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are our guardians and protectors. Celebrating their birthdays shows our respect, honor, and love for them.

× We had dinner together and enjoy very well with my family.

✓ We had dinner together and enjoyed it very much with my family.

The sentence mixes past tense 'had' with present tense 'enjoy'. Both verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency. Also, 'enjoy very well' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'enjoyed it very much'.

× When I was young I like to enjoy my birthday like celebrating and cake cutting and a big huge party throwing.

✓ When I was young, I liked to enjoy my birthday by celebrating, cutting cake, and throwing a big party.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was young') but uses present tense 'like'. It should be past tense 'liked'. Also, the phrase 'a big huge party throwing' is incorrect; it should be 'throwing a big party'.

× my family members that feels me warm, loving and important for myself.

✓ my family members who make me feel warm, loved, and important.

The relative pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used for people; 'who' is correct. 'Feels me warm' is incorrect; it should be 'make me feel warm'. Also, 'loving' should be 'loved' to describe how the person feels, and 'important for myself' is incorrect; it should be 'important'.

× In China, I guess parents, but they are important because parents are our guardian as well as our protector.

✓ In China, I guess parents, and they are important because parents are our guardians as well as our protectors.

The nouns 'guardian' and 'protector' should be plural to agree with the plural subject 'parents'.

× In China, I guess parents, but they are important because parents are our guardian as well as our protector.

✓ In China, I guess parents, and they are important because parents are our guardians as well as our protectors.

The conjunction 'but' is incorrectly used here; 'and' is appropriate to add information rather than contrast.