生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

示例: I usually have a small party with my friends on my birthday. We don't just stay at home; we enjoy delicious food and go shopping together, which makes the day unforgettable for me.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến việc sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm phong phú nội dung.

示例: When I was young, my mom always organized a big party for me. I invited my best friends and classmates, and we all went to a restaurant and a supermarket to enjoy food together.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần cải thiện về ngữ pháp và cách nối câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ phù hợp để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: Definitely, celebrating my birthday is important. It's not just about receiving presents like kids do; it's also a good excuse to treat myself to dinner at my favorite restaurant. Moreover, it's a special day to feel appreciated and express gratitude.

建议: Bạn nên chuẩn bị kiến thức chính xác và sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh nói mơ hồ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và thuyết phục hơn.

示例: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of the founding father, Mao Zedong. He was the first president who established modern China, so his birthday is considered a special day by many people.

× Not something crazy, usually throw small altogether party with my friends.

✓ Not something crazy, I usually throw a small get-together party with my friends.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I' as the subject and 'usually throw' as the verb corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'altogether party' is incorrect; 'get-together party' is the proper phrase.

× Not just a wall party, but we eat good food and go shopping together is a unforgettable experience that I loved.

✓ It's not just a wall party; eating good food and going shopping together is an unforgettable experience that I love.

The original sentence incorrectly connects clauses and misuses verb forms. Using a semicolon separates the ideas properly. 'Eat' and 'go' should be in gerund form ('eating', 'going') to act as subjects. 'A unforgettable' should be 'an unforgettable' due to vowel sound.

× My mom always celebrated a big party with my besties that I invited.

✓ My mom always celebrated a big party with my besties whom I invited.

The relative pronoun 'that' is less appropriate for people; 'whom' is correct as the object of 'invited'. The sentence is in past tense and is otherwise correct.

× All my classmates came to a food shop and supermarket to eat food together.

✓ All my classmates came to a food shop and supermarket to eat together.

The phrase 'to eat food together' is redundant; 'to eat together' suffices. Also, 'food shop and supermarket' should be connected properly, but the sentence is acceptable as is.

× Definitely, it is not just about kids and presents is a good excuse for you to treat yourself with a dinner in your favorite restaurant.

✓ Definitely, it is not just about kids and presents; it is a good excuse for you to treat yourself to dinner in your favorite restaurant.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunction or punctuation. Separating into two clauses with a semicolon improves clarity. 'Treat yourself with a dinner' should be 'treat yourself to dinner' as 'treat to' is the correct collocation.

× Plus, it's a special day for you to feel appreciated and be grateful.

✓ Plus, it's a special day for you to feel appreciated and grateful.

The phrase 'be grateful' is correct but can be simplified to 'grateful' to parallel 'feel appreciated'. Both are adjectives describing feelings.

× I reckon it's the first president's birthday in China.

✓ I reckon it's the birthday of the first president of China.

Using 'the first president's birthday in China' is awkward. Rephrasing to 'the birthday of the first president of China' is clearer and more natural.

× I don't really know his name, but he's the first one who established the China so the residents would celebrate his birthday in a really special day.

✓ I don't really know his name, but he's the first one who established China, so the residents celebrate his birthday as a really special day.

'The China' is incorrect; 'China' does not need an article. 'Would celebrate' suggests conditional or habitual past; 'celebrate' is better for present habitual action. 'In a really special day' should be 'as a really special day' to indicate the nature of the celebration.