生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details logically.

示例: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my friends. We go to a restaurant together, cut the cake, and enjoy the celebration. It is always a joyful time because I get to be with people I care about.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use past tense correctly and complete your thoughts. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to explain reasons. Also, avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

示例: When I was young, I was very happy on my birthday because it was a special day. I celebrated with my friends, and my father was also very happy. For example, on my 12th birthday, he gave me a mobile phone as a gift.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Use correct verb forms and sentence structures. Start with a clear topic sentence and explain your current feelings compared to the past using linking words like 'but' and 'when'.

示例: Currently, I am not very interested in celebrating my birthday. However, when I was young, I was very excited about it. The difference is because my priorities have changed over time.

建议: Your answer is honest but lacks elaboration. Try to provide a general opinion or guess based on what you know about birthdays in other cultures. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

示例: I have never visited China, so I am not sure about their birthday celebrations. However, I think that like many cultures, family members' birthdays are probably important to celebrate there.

× On my birthday, I spend the time with my friends, with all my friends and. Go to the restaurant and cut the cakes and whole things doing together and enjoy it.

✓ On my birthday, I spend time with all my friends. We go to a restaurant, cut the cake, do everything together, and enjoy it.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and sentence fragments. 'Go' should be 'We go' to form a complete sentence. 'Cut the cakes' should be 'cut the cake' as usually one cake is cut. 'Whole things doing together' is incorrect; it should be 'do everything together'. These corrections ensure proper verb usage and sentence structure.

× Yeah, when I was young, I have the very happy on my birthday because it's the very special.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, I was very happy on my birthday because it was very special.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'have' and 'it's' when referring to past events. The verbs should be in past tense 'was' to match the time frame. Also, 'the very happy' is incorrect; it should be 'very happy' without 'the'.

× It's the one day in 365 days.

✓ It's one day in 365 days.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'one day' in this context. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I celebrate with my friends.

✓ I celebrated with my friends.

Since the sentence refers to a past event ('when I was young'), the verb should be in past tense 'celebrated' instead of present tense 'celebrate'.

× My father was very happy on my birthday. He gift me a mobile phone in my 12th birthday.

✓ My father was very happy on my birthday. He gifted me a mobile phone on my 12th birthday.

The verb 'gift' should be in past tense 'gifted' to match the past time frame. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect here; it should be 'on' for specific days.

× I still.

✓ I still remember it.

The sentence fragment 'I still.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'remember it' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× If I talking about now, now I have not any interest in my birthday.

✓ If I am talking about now, I do not have any interest in my birthday.

The phrase 'If I talking' is incorrect; it should be 'If I am talking' to use the correct present continuous form. Also, 'have not any interest' is better expressed as 'do not have any interest'.

× I have but it's very little.

✓ I have some, but it's very little.

The sentence lacks a quantifier before 'but it's very little.' Adding 'some' clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.

× But when I young I have very excited on my birthday.

✓ But when I was young, I was very excited on my birthday.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'have' and omits 'was' after 'I'. The correct past tense forms 'was' should be used for both 'I was young' and 'I was very excited'.

× I never visited China so I don't know their cultures, how the people like who the people celebrate their birthday, celebrate or not celebrate.

✓ I have never visited China, so I don't know their culture or how people celebrate their birthdays, or if they celebrate at all.

The sentence has awkward pronoun use and structure. 'Their cultures' should be 'their culture' as culture is uncountable here. 'How the people like who the people celebrate' is unclear and corrected to 'how people celebrate their birthdays'. Also, 'celebrate or not celebrate' is better expressed as 'or if they celebrate at all'.