生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide specific details about what you usually do on your birthday. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family and friends. We have a small party at home, and I enjoy receiving surprise gifts. Additionally, I like to eat my favourite cake and share happiness with everyone.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Also, avoid confusing phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and natural.

示例: When I was young, I used to invite my friends and classmates to my birthday party. We prepared snacks and an amazing cake, which surprised me every year. It was always a joyful and memorable occasion.

建议: Your answer shows your opinion but lacks clarity and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain why it is important using specific reasons and linking words. Avoid grammatical errors to improve naturalness.

示例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it brings joy and a special feeling. Moreover, all the guests give me blessings, which makes me feel loved and appreciated.

建议: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Focus on giving a clear opinion with reasons. Use relevant vocabulary and linking words to explain why a particular birthday is important to celebrate in China.

示例: I believe that the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the elderly person's birthday. This is because respecting and honouring elders is a significant tradition in Chinese culture, and their birthdays are celebrated with great respect and joy.

× I like surprise gift and so many wishes.

✓ I like surprise gifts and so many wishes.

The noun 'gift' is countable and should be pluralized as 'gifts' when referring to more than one. Using 'so many' indicates a plural noun is expected.

× So usually I wait for gift because I'm I'm not waiting for this.

✓ So usually I wait for gifts because I'm not waiting for this.

The pronoun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match the context. Also, the repeated 'I'm' is a redundancy and should be corrected to a single 'I'm'.

× When I am young, my birthday during this time, I was invited friends, colleagues and prepared to snacks and amazing cakes Champion and I was surprised about it.

✓ When I was young, during my birthday, I invited friends and colleagues and prepared snacks and amazing cakes. I was surprised about it.

The phrase 'When I am young' should be in past tense 'When I was young' to match the past context. 'I was invited friends' is incorrect; it should be 'I invited friends' to indicate the subject performing the action. 'Prepared to snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'prepared snacks'. The sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences for clarity.

× Of course it is important but they celebrate especially my birthday.

✓ Of course it is important to celebrate, especially my birthday.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is about the importance of celebrating, so 'to celebrate' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× It's important because it's fun, special feeling and all guests are give me lots of blessings.

✓ It's important because it's fun, a special feeling, and all guests give me lots of blessings.

The phrase 'special feeling' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct. 'Are give' is incorrect; the correct verb form is 'give' to agree with the plural subject 'all guests'.

× I like my birthday celebrate.

✓ I like to celebrate my birthday.

The phrase 'my birthday celebrate' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to celebrate my birthday' to express liking the action.

× Of course, it's my own birthday because it's experience and looking gorgeous in China.

✓ Of course, it's my own birthday because it's an experience and I look gorgeous in China.

The phrase 'it's experience' needs an article 'an' before 'experience'. 'Looking gorgeous' should be 'I look gorgeous' to correctly use the subject and verb.

× I can see see a new country, so it's amazing for me.

✓ I can see a new country, so it's amazing for me.

The repeated word 'see' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'see'.