生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and organize your ideas logically using linking words. For example, you can say what you do first and then what you do later.

示例: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my friends and family. First, I hang out with my friends to share the joy, and later, I gather with my family for a special dinner.

建议: Your answer has some vocabulary mistakes and grammar errors. For example, 'wear chocolates' should be 'give chocolates'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and make your answer more coherent.

示例: When I was young, I used to give chocolates to all my classmates. After school, I would treat my friends by going to a cafe where we enjoyed lunch, cakes, and drinks together.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I believe celebrating my birthday is important because it only happens once a year. It makes me feel special and appreciated, which is why I think it's necessary to celebrate it.

建议: Your answer is off-topic and unclear. You should directly answer the question about birthdays in China. Also, avoid informal language and improve sentence structure for clarity.

示例: I am not very familiar with birthday celebrations in China since I have never visited. However, in Nepal, every person's birthday is important and celebrated with happiness and joy.

× I usually hang out with my friends and my family in my birthday because I can share my birthday joy with them and make my body special.

✓ I usually hang out with my friends and my family on my birthday because I can share my birthday joy with them and make my day special.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to specific days; 'on' should be used instead. Also, 'make my body special' is incorrect; it should be 'make my day special' to convey the intended meaning.

× So I usually have them and at last at we I gather with my family to have dinner.

✓ So I usually have them, and at last, we gather with my family to have dinner.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing punctuation. Correct word order and punctuation improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When I was young, I used to wear chocolates to my whole classmates and I used to treat my friends after the school and we go to the cafe and we eat some lunch and cakes and drinks.

✓ When I was young, I used to give chocolates to all my classmates, and I used to treat my friends after school. We would go to the cafe and eat some lunch, cakes, and drink beverages.

The verb 'wear' is incorrect; 'give' is appropriate for chocolates. 'To my whole classmates' should be 'to all my classmates'. 'After the school' should be 'after school'. Also, verb tenses and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.

× Yeah, I think it's important to celebrate my birthday because it's just comes once in a year and we should feel we are feeling special on that day.

✓ Yeah, I think it's important to celebrate my birthday because it just comes once a year, and we should feel special on that day.

The phrase 'it's just comes' is incorrect; 'it just comes' is correct. Also, 'once in a year' should be 'once a year'. The phrase 'we should feel we are feeling special' is redundant; 'we should feel special' is clearer.

× I don't really know about designer because I've never visited there.

✓ I don't really know about the place because I've never visited there.

The word 'designer' seems incorrect in context; likely 'the place' or 'that place' is intended. Also, 'visited there' is acceptable but 'been there' might be more natural.

× In my country, the Nepalese culture, we, each and every person, every family are going to celebrate the birthday because they are one just in a year, and they're gonna celebrate with the happiness, joy and everything.

✓ In my country, Nepalese culture, every person and every family celebrate their birthdays because they come just once a year, and they celebrate with happiness, joy, and everything.

'The birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'every person and every family'. 'They are one just in a year' is incorrect; 'they come just once a year' is correct. Also, 'gonna' is informal; 'celebrate' is better in this context.