蛋糕— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答不够连贯，表达不清晰，且有语法错误。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和无意义的停顿。可以用简单句表达喜欢或不喜欢的原因，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: I don't like eating cakes or sweet foods because they contain a lot of calories. However, I really enjoy drinking milk tea.

建议: 回答内容不明确，表达混乱，缺乏具体信息。建议直接回答问题，介绍一种传统中式糕点，说明其名称和特点，使用连贯的句子。

示例: Yes, there are traditional Chinese cakes. For example, mooncakes are popular during the Mid-Autumn Festival. They are round pastries filled with sweet or savory fillings.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议用完整句子表达自己会做蛋糕的事实，并简要说明原因和经验，避免重复和无意义的停顿。

示例: Yes, I can make cakes. When I was a child, I was very interested in baking, and my mother taught me how to make simple cakes for my family.

建议: 回答不连贯且语法错误较多。建议直接表达童年时是否喜欢吃蛋糕，并说明原因，使用连贯的句子和适当的连接词。

示例: No, I didn't like eating cakes when I was a child because my family preferred less sweet foods, so we rarely had desserts at home.

建议: 回答表达不清晰且有重复。建议简洁明了地说明不喜欢饭后吃甜点的原因，使用完整句子和连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: No, I don't like having desserts after meals because I usually feel full and cannot eat anything else.

× I don't like to eat cakes or the other sweet foods because I think it has a, has a really high calorie and, uh, and uh.

✓ I don't like to eat cakes or other sweet foods because I think they have really high calories.

这里“cakes”和“sweet foods”是复数，谓语动词和代词也应使用复数形式，因此“has a really high calorie”应改为“have really high calories”。

× And their crazy about this part of the property.

✓ And they're crazy about this part of the property.

这里应使用缩写形式“they're”表示“they are”，而不是“their”，因为“their”是物主代词，不能用作谓语。

× And milk tea I really liked.

✓ And I really like milk tea.

时态应与上下文一致，表达现在喜欢，且语序应为主语+谓语+宾语。

× Traditional Chinese cakes such as this, a kind of desert which cause a new shopping and which means ox talk.

✓ Traditional Chinese cakes such as this are a kind of dessert which causes a new shopping and which means ox tongue.

“cakes”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”；“dessert”拼写错误，应为“dessert”；“cause”应为第三人称单数“causes”，因为主语是单数“a kind of dessert”。

× And it's really, it's really all an, uh, having.

✓ And it's really delicious.

原句表达不清，应使用合适的形容词“delicious”来描述食物的味道。

× Yes, yes I can. Yes, I can make cakes because when I was a child I really interested in the making cakes.

✓ Yes, I can. Yes, I can make cakes because when I was a child I was really interested in making cakes.

过去时态中，形容词“interested”前应加助动词“was”；“the making cakes”应改为“making cakes”，去掉冠词。

× So my mom, my mother prepared me.

✓ So my mom, my mother taught me.

“prepared me”用法不当，应使用“taught me”表示教某人做某事。

× Uh, open and uh, I always do Audi some cakes, but it's very simple and my family.

✓ I always made some cakes, but they were very simple for my family.

“do Audi some cakes”表达错误，应改为“made some cakes”；“open”无意义应删除；“it's very simple and my family”语义不通，改为“they were very simple for my family”。

× No, I, I don't like to eat cakes as a child because my family, my family members hold on like some, uh, some foods are really a sweet.

✓ No, I didn't like to eat cakes as a child because my family members didn't like some foods that were really sweet.

描述过去的喜好，应使用过去时态“didn't like”；“hold on like”表达错误，应改为“didn't like”；“a sweet”应去掉冠词。

× So, uh, so we don't have the happy to eat some desert in daily life.

✓ So, we weren't happy to eat desserts in daily life.

“don't have the happy”表达错误，应改为“weren't happy”；“some desert”应为复数“desserts”。

× No, I don't. I don't like to have some desserts after meals because I think I'll. I am already. I'm alright a fullness and I think I don't I cannot eat something anymore and so even even if.

✓ No, I don't. I don't like to have desserts after meals because I think I'm already full and I cannot eat anything more, even if...

“I'll. I am already.”语法不完整，应改为“I think I'm already full”；“alright a fullness”表达错误，应改为“already full”；“something”应改为“anything”表示否定句中的不定代词。