蛋糕— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lengkap dan hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, jelaskan preferensi dengan kalimat yang jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide.

示例: I prefer eating fudgy brownies because they are moist and rich in flavor. Besides that, I also enjoy ice cream. However, I don't really like traditional cakes.

建议: Perbaiki pemilihan kosakata dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan koheren. Jelaskan dengan spesifik tentang kue tradisional yang dimaksud dan hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau membingungkan.

示例: Yes, one traditional Chinese cake is called 'Bobo'. It comes in many flavors, and my favorite is the chicken flavor because it has a unique and savory taste.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

示例: Yes, I am a baker, so I can make cakes. Not only cakes, but I also bake bread and cookies. I enjoy baking because it helps me relieve stress and allows me to express myself.

建议: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan buat jawaban yang lebih jelas dan lengkap. Jelaskan pengalaman masa kecil dengan kalimat yang mudah dimengerti dan hindari kalimat yang tidak selesai.

示例: Actually, I don't have many memories of liking cakes when I was a child because I was a picky eater. My mother often found it hard to get me to eat certain foods.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban yang lebih jelas dan efektif. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan antar ide.

示例: I think having dessert after meals is important because it helps cleanse the palate. The taste of the previous food lingers in the mouth, and dessert can refresh it.

× And I like eat ice cream.

✓ And I like eating ice cream.

The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing general preferences. Therefore, 'like eat' should be corrected to 'like eating'. This is a common rule in English verb patterns.

× I think bubble is one of traditional Chinese cake.

✓ I think bubble is one of the traditional Chinese cakes.

The phrase 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun, so 'cake' should be 'cakes'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'traditional Chinese cakes' to specify the group.

× I think bubble is one of traditional Chinese cake.

✓ I think bubble is one of the traditional Chinese cakes.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'traditional Chinese cakes' to indicate a specific group. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× I like Papa so much because I think of the I I think that Bobo is such a have has such a so many taste and one of them that I like is taste of chicken.

✓ I like Papa so much because I think that Bobo has so many tastes, and one of them that I like is the taste of chicken.

The sentence contains repeated pronouns and unclear structure. 'I think of the I I think' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'has such a so many taste' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'has so many tastes'. 'Taste of chicken' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Since I myself as a Baker so yeah, I can make cakes.

✓ Since I am a baker myself, so yeah, I can make cakes.

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' after 'I' to form the correct present tense. Also, 'myself' is better placed after the noun 'baker' for clarity.

× Since I myself as a Baker so yeah, I can make cakes.

✓ Since I am a baker myself, I can make cakes.

Using both 'Since' and 'so' together is redundant. 'Since' already indicates cause, so 'so' should be omitted for correct conjunction usage.

× I I not not only cake, but I also make some bread and cookies.

✓ I not only make cakes, but I also make some bread and cookies.

The sentence has repeated words and incorrect word order. 'Not only' should be followed by the verb 'make' to form the correct structure. Also, 'cake' should be plural 'cakes' to match the context.

× Actually I don't really I have any thought or any memories about liking some cake in my childhood because I think that in my childhood I just a not really easily to eat some food.

✓ Actually, I don't really have any thoughts or memories about liking cake in my childhood because I think that in my childhood I was not really able to eat some food easily.

The sentence has redundant pronouns and incorrect word order. 'I don't really I have' should be 'I don't really have'. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts'. The phrase 'I just a not really easily to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I was not really able to eat easily'.

× My mom will find my find hard my to.

✓ My mom found it hard for me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper pronouns and verb tense to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I think having some dessert after meals is a must because I mean like the taste of the food that you eat before doing something is just umm in your mouth and it needs to clean by dessert.

✓ I think having some dessert after meals is a must because the taste of the food you ate before doing something remains in your mouth and needs to be cleaned by dessert.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect verb forms. 'Needs to clean by dessert' should be 'needs to be cleaned by dessert'. Also, 'the taste of the food that you eat before doing something is just umm in your mouth' is better expressed as 'the taste of the food you ate before doing something remains in your mouth'.