硬币— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., saying both 'online banking apps' and 'ATM' twice), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief reason or example to support your answer using a linking word (because/so).

示例: No, I rarely use coins now. I mainly pay with mobile banking apps or cards because most stores accept contactless payments and I find them faster.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence then add a specific reason. Use linking words (because/so) and avoid vague comparisons. One supporting detail is enough and should mention a concrete inconvenience (time, weight, change).

示例: No, coins are not convenient because they are heavy and slow down payments. For example, I often prefer contactless payments because they save time at the checkout.

建议: Correct grammar and make the answer concise. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (Yes, I collected coins). Then give one specific detail about why or what you collected, using a linking word (because/so) and a brief example.

示例: Yes, I collected coins when I was a child. I was excited by coins from different countries, so I kept them in a small box and liked showing them to my friends.

建议: Be more natural and avoid repeating 'do not'. Use one clear sentence and add a short reason with a linking word. Mention a typical alternative you use (card, phone) and a brief example of when you rely on it.

示例: No, I rarely carry coins when I go out because I pay with my phone or debit card. For instance, I use contactless payments for coffee and groceries.

× No, I do not use coins now.

✓ No, I do not use coins now.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present tense context of the question. No change is needed.

× I usually use online banking apps and ATM to do my transactions and to purchase things from supermarkets etcetera.

✓ I usually use online banking apps and ATMs to do my transactions and to purchase things from supermarkets, etc.

The term ATM is singular while 'apps' is plural; parallel structure and correct plural form are required for consistency. Use 'ATMs' to match the plural idea of multiple services or machines. Also add a comma before 'etc.' for clarity.

× So I do.

✓ So I do use them.

The short answer 'So I do' is vague in this context. Expanding to 'So I do use them' clarifies the reference to coins or alternative methods. This fixes a sentence structure/clarity issue.

× No, it is not convenient to use coins.

✓ No, it is not convenient to use coins.

This sentence is correct in present tense and fits the question about general convenience. No change is needed.

× It is better to use online applications or ATMs.

✓ It is better to use online applications or ATMs.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The verb 'to use' as an infinitive after 'better' is appropriate here; no change required.

× Is definitely I have collected coins when I was kid.

✓ I definitely collected coins when I was a kid.

Errors: incorrect word order ('Is definitely I' is not English), incorrect tense mix (present perfect 'have collected' with 'when I was a kid' which requires simple past), and missing article before 'kid'. Correct to simple past 'collected' and include 'a' before 'kid'. Place 'definitely' before the verb for natural word order.

× As a kid I had excitement over new things, so I had collected coins.

✓ As a kid, I was excited about new things, so I collected coins.

Using 'had excitement' is awkward; use the adjective 'was excited about' to describe feelings. Also, do not use past perfect 'had collected' unless referring to an earlier past action relative to another past event; simple past 'collected' is appropriate here. Add a comma after the introductory phrase for correct punctuation.

× No, I do not carry coins while going out.

✓ No, I do not carry coins when I go out.

Use the simple present 'when I go out' to describe habitual actions. 'While going out' is awkward in this habitual context; 'when I go out' is idiomatic and matches the present tense.

× I have online banking applications and ATMs to do transactions while purchasing, so I do not.

✓ I use online banking applications and ATMs to make transactions when I shop, so I do not.

Several issues: 'have online banking applications and ATMs' sounds like ownership of ATMs which is incorrect; use 'use' for services. 'To do transactions while purchasing' is unnatural — use 'to make transactions when I shop.' The short 'so I do not' is vague; complete it to 'so I do not (carry coins).' This correction matches habitual present-tense meaning and clarifies intention.