香水— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不完整。建议练习完整句子表达，注意主谓一致和时态，避免断句。

示例: Yes, I like perfume. I remember when my brother graduated, he sent me a bottle of perfume. It was quite expensive, and I felt very happy to receive it.

建议: 回答内容较简单，句子断裂，缺少连贯性。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富细节。

示例: Yes, I use perfume daily because it makes me feel happy. When I apply a little, the scent lasts throughout the day.

建议: 表达不清晰，语法和词汇错误较多，句子不完整。建议练习用完整句子表达想法，并注意词汇的准确使用。

示例: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift. For example, last week my best friend graduated, so I sent her a photo of a perfume I wanted to buy for her.

建议: 回答混乱，语法错误严重，表达不完整。建议多练习句子结构，使用简单明了的表达方式。

示例: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive. For instance, when I bought perfume for my best friend, it cost me a lot of money.

× I remember that when my. Brother. Graduate, she send me a. Bottle of perfume is, so is. Expensive and I. Very.

✓ I remember that when my brother graduated, she sent me a bottle of perfume. It was so expensive and I was very happy.

这里涉及动词时态错误。'Graduate' 应该用过去式 'graduated'，'send' 应该用过去式 'sent'，'is' 应该用过去式 'was'，'I' 后面缺少动词，补充 'was very happy'。过去发生的事情需要用过去时态。

× Yes I do use the perfume makes me feel happy and when I. Use a little, it can continue. A long day. Yes.

✓ Yes, I do use perfume. It makes me feel happy, and when I use a little, it can last a long day.

句子结构不完整，'use a little' 后面缺少宾语，'continue a long day' 用词不当，应该用 'last a long day'。'Use' 后面不需要加 '-ing'，这里用一般现在时。

× Yes, I will buy perfume as a gift. I still remember that that's a week my best stuff brand graduate so I send her a. Photo of perfume and see that very loud it.

✓ Yes, I will buy perfume as a gift. I still remember that last week my best friend graduated, so I sent her a photo of perfume and saw that it was very lovely.

'that's a week' 应为 'last week'，'stuff brand' 应为 'best friend'，'graduate' 应用过去式 'graduated'，'send' 应用过去式 'sent'，'see' 应用过去式 'saw'，'very loud it' 语义不通，改为 'very lovely'。过去发生的事情需要用过去时态。

× Yes, I think perfume is very expensive. Just the I said last so we I send my best friend of perfume. And it's caused my. What mouse? Money, yeah.

✓ Yes, I think perfume is very expensive. Just like I said last time, I sent perfume to my best friend, and it cost me a lot of money.

'Just the I said last so we' 语序和用词错误，改为 'Just like I said last time'；'send' 应用过去式 'sent'；'what mouse? money' 语义不明，改为 'cost me a lot of money'。单复数和时态需要注意。