老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I had a favourite teacher during high school. She was very kind and patient, always considering different aspects of problems. Because of her support, I was able to improve my understanding and confidence in difficult subjects.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details with linking words to improve coherence and avoid redundancy.

示例: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I have forgotten their names and do not know where they are now. Since many years have passed, I have lost contact with them.

建议: Your answer shows good ideas but is interrupted by hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to speak more fluently, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific examples to support your points.

示例: My favourite teacher helped me not only academically but also personally. She was like a close friend whom I could rely on because she listened patiently and taught me important life lessons beyond the classroom.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly, use correct grammar, and organise your ideas logically with linking words to improve clarity.

示例: I do not plan to become a teacher in the future because I want to immigrate to a foreign country and work as a nurse. Additionally, I aim to pursue further education and obtain a doctoral degree.

× During school time we had lots of teacher and also during high school time we had a teacher.

✓ During school time we had lots of teachers and also during high school time we had a teacher.

The noun 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' because 'lots of' indicates more than one. Using singular here is incorrect.

× She was really gorgeous and she was kind and considering.

✓ She was really gorgeous and she was kind and considerate.

The adjective 'considering' is incorrect here; the correct adjective to describe a kind and thoughtful person is 'considerate'.

× I recall that she was patient and also she consider all different aspects of issues so she could raise my.

✓ I recall that she was patient and also she considered all different aspects of issues so she could raise me.

The verb 'consider' should be in past tense 'considered' to match the past context. Also, 'raise my' is incomplete and should be 'raise me' to make sense.

× No, actually, I'm not still in touch with my primary school.

✓ No, actually, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher.

The pronoun 'my primary school' is incorrect here; it should specify 'my primary school teacher' to refer to the person.

× I forget. I forgot all of them.

✓ I forgot all of them.

The present tense 'I forget' is inconsistent with the past context; only 'I forgot' is appropriate here.

× And I don't know about where, when, and also I don't know about when they get retired.

✓ And I don't know where or when they retired.

The phrase 'I don't know about where, when' is incorrect; 'about' is unnecessary. Also, 'get retired' should be 'retired' in past tense.

× So I'm not still in touch with them.

✓ So I'm still not in touch with them.

The adverb 'still' should be placed before 'not' for correct emphasis and natural English word order.

× I believe that she was not only my, umm, teacher, she was my close friends at that time because I, I could rely on her and also I could count on her.

✓ I believe that she was not only my, umm, teacher, she was my close friend at that time because I could rely on her and also I could count on her.

The noun 'friends' should be singular 'friend' because it refers to one person.

× Uh, she, uh, listened to me on that time, uh, patiently and she could teach me and educate me different aspect of life and.

✓ Uh, she, uh, listened to me at that time, uh, patiently and she could teach me and educate me on different aspects of life.

The preposition 'on' should be 'at' when referring to a specific time. Also, 'aspect' should be plural 'aspects' to match 'different'. 'Educate me different aspect' requires 'on' before the object.

× I don't know what the future holds.

✓ I don't know what the future holds.

This sentence is correct and fits the context; no correction needed.

× I decided to immigrate in foreign country and work as a nurse in hospital in abroad.

✓ I decided to immigrate to a foreign country and work as a nurse in a hospital abroad.

The correct preposition with 'immigrate' is 'to'. Also, 'a foreign country' needs the article 'a'. 'In hospital' should be 'in a hospital'. 'In abroad' is incorrect; 'abroad' does not take a preposition here.

× I want to pursue my education and create a doctoral degree and on that time I will be educated.

✓ I want to pursue my education and earn a doctoral degree and at that time I will be educated.

The verb 'create' is incorrect; one 'earns' a degree. The phrase 'on that time' should be 'at that time' for correct preposition use.