老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of 'she hugged me overcome a very bad experience about mathematics,' say 'she helped me overcome difficulties in mathematics.' Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

示例: Yes, my favourite teacher is Miss Ali Alam Sali. I am very grateful to her because she helped me overcome my difficulties with mathematics.

建议: Improve your answer by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, instead of 'I can't find any primary school teachers,' say 'I have lost contact with my primary school teachers.' Also, clarify your points with linking words like 'however' or 'but' to make your answer coherent.

示例: No, I have lost contact with my primary school teachers. However, I am still in touch with my high school teachers, especially my mathematics and Islamic studies teachers.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more specific vocabulary. For example, use 'by' to explain how she helped and replace 'any kind or sort of anxiety' with 'any anxiety.'

示例: She helped me by teaching mathematics in a relaxing way, so I didn't feel any anxiety during the classes.

建议: Make your answer more natural and clear by rephrasing. For example, say 'I don't want to be a school teacher, but I would like to teach my own child.' Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'inside the school.'

示例: No, I don't want to be a school teacher, but I think teaching my own child would be a perfect option for me.

× Yes, my favorite teacher at school, her name is Miss Ali Alam Sali.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher at school is Miss Ali Alam Sali.

The sentence incorrectly uses the pronoun 'her' redundantly after the subject. In English, when the subject is already mentioned, we do not repeat it with a pronoun in the same clause. The correct structure is to say 'my favorite teacher at school is Miss Ali Alam Sali.'

× I owe too much gratitude to this teacher because she hugged me overcome a very bad experience about mathematics.

✓ I owe a lot of gratitude to this teacher because she helped me overcome a very bad experience with mathematics.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'too much gratitude' is better expressed as 'a lot of gratitude'; 'hugged me overcome' is incorrect and should be 'helped me overcome'; and 'about mathematics' should be 'with mathematics' to correctly express the experience related to the subject. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I can't find any primary school teachers, but I'm still in connection with my high school teachers.

✓ No, I can't find any primary school teachers, but I'm still in touch with my high school teachers.

The phrase 'in connection with' is not commonly used in this context. The correct idiomatic expression is 'in touch with' when referring to maintaining contact with someone.

× I still text my mathematics teacher and my Islamic teacher subject.

✓ I still text my mathematics teacher and my Islamic teacher.

The word 'subject' is unnecessary and incorrectly placed here. The phrase should simply be 'my Islamic teacher' without adding 'subject'.

× She helped me to solve the mathematics problems in a relaxing way where I don't feel any kind or sort of anxiety during the mathematics classes.

✓ She helped me solve the mathematics problems in a relaxing way where I don't feel any kind of anxiety during the mathematics classes.

The phrase 'any kind or sort of anxiety' is redundant. The correct expression is 'any kind of anxiety.' Also, 'helped me to solve' can be simplified to 'helped me solve' for naturalness.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher inside the school.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher at school.

The preposition 'inside' is not typically used with 'school' in this context. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to being a teacher in a school setting.