镜子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, be careful with word choice, for example, 'adjust my wait' seems to be a mistake; you might mean 'adjust my waist' or 'adjust my appearance'. Using linking words can improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror about five or six times a day to check if my makeup and hair are in place. Sometimes, I also adjust my appearance if needed to make sure I look presentable.

建议: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question. To improve, try to combine sentences using linking words to make your response more fluent and natural. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors like 'which doesn't have' should be 'which didn't have' to match past tense.

示例: Yes, when I moved to Seattle, I rented a new apartment that didn't have a full-length mirror, so I bought one from IKEA to fill that need.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains some unclear phrases like 'I don't have the happy to carry'. Try to use simpler and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas and use linking words to improve flow.

示例: No, I don't usually carry a small mirror in my purse because I find public bathroom mirrors and checking my appearance before leaving the office sufficient. I prefer not to check my makeup too often.

建议: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and unclear expressions, such as 'mirror sometimes make me feel that they are some other surface for some other space looking at me.' Try to clarify your ideas and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your thoughts logically.

示例: No, I wouldn't use mirrors to decorate my room because having too many reflective surfaces makes me feel uneasy. Sometimes, it feels like the mirrors are watching me from different angles, which makes me nervous.

× Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror, Julie, 5 or 6 times a day I look at myself to check whether my makeup or my hair is in a proper state or do I need to wash my face or adjust my wait a little bit.

✓ Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror, Julie. Five or six times a day, I look at myself to check whether my makeup or my hair is in a proper state or if I need to wash my face or adjust my waist a little bit.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and lacks proper punctuation, making it confusing. Also, 'wait' is a typo and should be 'waist'. The sentence should be split for clarity, and 'or do I need' should be corrected to 'or if I need' to maintain parallel structure.

× Yes, I bought a mirror when I just moved into Seattle.

✓ Yes, I bought a mirror when I had just moved into Seattle.

The phrase 'when I just moved' should use the past perfect tense 'had just moved' to indicate that the moving happened before buying the mirror.

× No, I don't have the happy to carry a mini mirror in my purse everyday.

✓ No, I don't have the habit of carrying a mini mirror in my purse every day.

The phrase 'have the happy to carry' is incorrect. It should be 'have the habit of carrying' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'everyday' as one word is an adjective meaning common; the correct form here is 'every day' as two words.

× Looking at those public bathroom mirrors or checking my appearance before I leave my office is already enough for me.

✓ Looking at those public bathroom mirrors or checking my appearance before I leave my office is already enough for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not contain errors related to prepositions or other listed grammar problems.

× No, I don't like having too many reflective surface in my room.

✓ No, I don't like having too many reflective surfaces in my room.

The noun 'surface' should be plural 'surfaces' to agree with 'too many', which requires a plural noun.

× It makes me feel nervous sometimes because mirror sometimes make me feel that they are.

✓ It makes me feel nervous sometimes because mirrors sometimes make me feel that they are watching me.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'Mirror' should be plural 'mirrors' to agree with 'sometimes make'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion to convey the intended meaning.

× Some other surface for some other space looking at me.

✓ It feels like some other surface in some other space is looking at me.

This fragment is incomplete and lacks a verb. It should be restructured into a complete sentence to express the idea clearly.