梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some redundancy. Try to be more concise and organise your ideas logically. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, be careful with idiomatic expressions to ensure they fit the context naturally.

示例: When I was younger, I dreamed of becoming a nurse. I worked hard and went the extra mile to achieve this goal. Another dream of mine was to visit Venice in Italy, which I found fascinating and mysterious.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct minor grammatical errors. Also, try to avoid repeating the word 'dreams' too often by using synonyms or pronouns.

示例: I usually don't share my dreams with others. However, I enjoy learning about other people's dreams because it encourages me to think creatively and exposes me to different perspectives, which broadens my horizons.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your thoughts clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

示例: I believe dreams have special meanings because they motivate us to set clear goals and pursue them. Although we may face many challenges, having dreams helps us to overcome difficulties and stay focused.

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to use consistent verb tenses and organise your ideas logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples to illustrate your determination.

示例: Definitely, I work hard and go the extra mile to make my dreams come true because it gives me a sense of satisfaction and accomplishment. Although I face many challenges, my dreams motivate me to set clear goals and keep improving.

× By burning the midnight oil and also going extra mile, I could accomplish my dream.

✓ By burning the midnight oil and also going the extra mile, I could accomplish my dream.

The phrase 'going extra mile' is missing the definite article 'the' and 'mile' should be singular in this idiomatic expression. The correct phrase is 'going the extra mile'.

× The other most important dream was going to Venice in Italy and it was really fascinating for me and it was really mysterious for me to visit it.

✓ The other most important dream was to go to Venice in Italy, and it was really fascinating and mysterious for me to visit it.

The verb 'going' should be in the infinitive form 'to go' to express the dream properly. Also, 'fascinating for me and it was really mysterious for me' is redundant; combining them improves clarity.

× No, I never share my dreams with others and I like to know about their dreams because it helps me to think out-of-the-box and know about different opinion and their dreams help us to broaden our horizons and get familiar with different dreams.

✓ No, I never share my dreams with others and I like to know about their dreams because it helps me to think out-of-the-box and know about different opinions, and their dreams help us to broaden our horizons and get familiar with different dreams.

The word 'opinion' should be plural 'opinions' because it refers to multiple different views.

× Meanings actually I believe that they have a special meanings.

✓ Actually, I believe that they have special meanings.

The phrase 'a special meanings' is incorrect because 'meanings' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× They can motivate us to set a clear goal and follow them.

✓ They can motivate us to set clear goals and follow them.

The modal verb 'can' is used correctly, but 'a clear goal' should be plural 'clear goals' to match 'them' which refers to multiple goals.

× And also during that time we may have lots of challenges but but by having dreams we can put up them and all the other things that I like to mention is really important to bring.

✓ Also, during that time we may have lots of challenges, but by having dreams we can put up with them, and all the other things that I would like to mention are really important to bring up.

The phrase 'put up them' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'put up with them'. Also, 'all the other things that I like to mention is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject.

× I burned the midnight oil and I go extra miles always to bring them to the real life because it's really important.

✓ I burn the midnight oil and always go the extra mile to bring them to real life because it's really important.

The phrase 'go extra miles' should be 'go the extra mile' (singular) as it is an idiomatic expression. Also, 'burned' should be present tense 'burn' to match the ongoing effort.

× I burned the midnight oil and I go extra miles always to bring them to the real life because it's really important.

✓ I burn the midnight oil and always go the extra mile to bring them to real life because it's really important.

The verb 'burned' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'burn' is appropriate. Also, 'go extra miles' should be 'go the extra mile'.

× They motivate me to set a clear goal and follow them during that time.

✓ They motivate me to set clear goals and follow them during that time.

'A clear goal' is singular but 'them' refers to multiple goals, so 'clear goals' should be plural to maintain agreement.