梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, and then add specific supporting details using correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I can remember my dreams clearly. For example, I used to dream of becoming a professional soccer player, but now I have different goals.

建议: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear direct answer first, then explain your reason with linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

示例: No, I don't share my dreams with others because currently I don't have any specific dreams. However, if I had a dream, I would be happy to share it with others.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use complete sentences with clear reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because they show our passions and goals. Therefore, people should have dreams and work hard to achieve them.

建议: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasons with proper linking words and sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true. First, I need to find a clear dream, and then I should work hard to achieve my goals.

× Yes, I can, but now I have no dream.

✓ Yes, I can, but now I have no dreams.

The noun 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' because it refers to multiple aspirations or goals, not a single one. In English, when talking about general aspirations, the plural form is commonly used.

× It is because my dream was professional soccer player.

✓ It is because my dream was to be a professional soccer player.

The phrase 'was professional soccer player' lacks the preposition 'to be' which is necessary to indicate the intended profession. The correct form is 'was to be a professional soccer player.'

× However, now I can.

✓ However, now I cannot.

The sentence 'However, now I can.' is incomplete and unclear. Based on context, the student likely means they no longer have dreams, so 'cannot' is appropriate to express inability.

× No, I don't because now I have I don't have dreams.

✓ No, I don't because now I don't have dreams.

The phrase 'I have I don't have' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'I don't have' to express the absence of dreams.

× So if I have dream I will share other people so.

✓ So if I have a dream, I will share it with other people.

The noun 'dream' needs an article 'a' because it is singular and countable. Also, 'share other people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'share it with other people.'

× Yes, because passionate and Roma so I think people should have dreams so and people should practice.

✓ Yes, because being passionate and determined is important, so I think people should have dreams and practice to achieve them.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions and structure. 'Passionate and Roma' is unclear; likely intended 'passionate and determined.' The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, because first I have to looking for dream, second I should achieve this goal so now.

✓ Yes, because first I have to look for a dream, second I should achieve this goal now.

The verb 'have to' should be followed by the base form 'look,' not the '-ing' form 'looking.' Also, 'a dream' needs the article 'a' as it is singular and countable.

× I often find.

✓ I often search for my dream.

The sentence 'I often find.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'search for my dream' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.