梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid vague phrases like 'are a steal in a way.' Also, use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary to express your ideas.

示例: Yes, I can remember my dreams clearly. Some of my dreams, like traveling abroad, I have already achieved, but others, such as becoming famous, are still goals I hope to accomplish.

建议: Your answer lacks grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, and express your thoughts in complete sentences. Also, avoid repeating ideas and be more specific about your reasons.

示例: I am interested in other people's dreams and never judge them. However, I prefer to keep my own dreams private because I believe sharing them might make them harder to achieve.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly explain why you think dreams have special meanings, using specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because they motivate people to work hard and achieve their goals. Dreams can also inspire families and communities to come together and support each other.

建议: Your answer is enthusiastic but could be more structured and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then support it with reasons or advice. Avoid mixing informal phrases with formal speech.

示例: Absolutely, I want to make my dreams come true. I believe that with hard work and dedication, anyone can achieve their goals, so I always try my best to study and improve myself.

× Yes I do because I make my old dreams true, but some of my purposes like going abroad and uh being a famous and well known people are a steal in a way.

✓ Yes, I do because I make my old dreams come true, but some of my purposes like going abroad and uh being a famous and well-known person are a steal in a way.

The phrase 'make my old dreams true' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make my old dreams come true' because 'make' is followed by the base verb 'come' plus 'true'. Also, 'people' is plural, but the sentence refers to 'a famous and well known people' which is incorrect; it should be 'a famous and well-known person' to match singular form.

× I interested to another's dream, however I don't judge them but I don't like to share my dreams to others because I assume tell your dream to other people.

✓ I am interested in others' dreams; however, I don't judge them, but I don't like to share my dreams with others because I assume telling your dream to other people...

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' after 'I' to form the present tense 'I am interested'. The preposition 'to' after 'interested' is incorrect; it should be 'in'. 'Another's dream' is incorrect; the plural possessive 'others'' is appropriate here. Also, 'share my dreams to others' should be 'share my dreams with others'. The phrase 'I assume tell your dream' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I assume telling your dream' or 'I assume that telling your dream'.

× I don't like to share my dreams to others because I assume tell your dream to other people.

✓ I don't like to share my dreams with others because I assume telling your dream to other people...

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with' not 'to'. Therefore, 'share my dreams to others' should be 'share my dreams with others'. Also, 'tell your dream to other people' is acceptable, but the sentence structure before it needs correction as explained earlier.

× So I keep them secret.

✓ So I keep them secret.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, because dreams are a motivate to people and admire them to go and try for them to make them true.

✓ Yes, because dreams are a motivation to people and inspire them to go and try to make them come true.

The word 'motivate' is a verb, but here a noun 'motivation' is needed. Also, 'admire them to go' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'inspire them to go'. The phrase 'try for them to make them true' is awkward; it should be 'try to make them come true'.

× And it means to a family, to a person, to a group of people to build a new communicate community.

✓ And it means a lot to a family, to a person, to a group of people to build a new communicative community.

The phrase 'means to a family' is incomplete; it should be 'means a lot to a family'. Also, 'communicate community' is incorrect; the adjective form 'communicative' is appropriate here.

× Absolutely, and I assume everybody wants to make their dreams become true.

✓ Absolutely, and I assume everybody wants to make their dreams come true.

The phrase 'make their dreams become true' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make their dreams come true'.

× Don't let your dreams be dreams.

✓ Don't let your dreams be just dreams.

Adding 'just' clarifies the meaning and improves the sentence structure, emphasizing not to let dreams remain only dreams.

× Try for it, study hard and make your wishes or another way your purposes become true.

✓ Try for it, study hard, and make your wishes or, in another way, your purposes come true.

The phrase 'make your wishes or another way your purposes become true' is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be 'make your wishes or, in another way, your purposes come true' to clarify the meaning and correct verb form.