梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep responses concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., remove extra 'and', use singular/plural correctly).

示例: Yes, I often remember my dreams vividly. For example, when I have strange or intense dreams, I usually tell my family or friends and ask them what they think the dreams might mean.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Use correct word forms and linking phrases (e.g., 'especially', 'because', 'for example'). Keep to under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually share my dreams with my mother, especially when a dream repeats. For example, if I keep dreaming about falling or being chased, I tell her and we discuss what it might mean.

建议: Make the opinion concise and support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid vague phrases and correct grammar (use 'show' not 'shows' if referring to 'dreams', and 'other people' instead of 'other peoples').

示例: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our hidden fears and desires. For instance, dreaming about exams might reveal anxiety about performance or future goals.

建议: Answer directly, then give one or two personal specifics about which dream and how you plan to achieve it. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'achieve' or 'fulfill' instead of 'secure') and avoid generalizations about 'everyone.'

示例: Yes, I do want to make my dreams come true. For example, I hope to become a teacher, so I am studying education and gaining experience by tutoring younger students to reach that goal.

× Yes, I remember my dreams vividly and it and sometimes when I have those extreme or weird dreams I share it with my families and friends and ask about what does the dreams indicate.

✓ Yes, I remember my dreams vividly, and sometimes when I have those extreme or weird dreams I share them with my family and friends and ask what the dreams indicate.

Pronoun agreement and misuse: 'it' and 'it' refer to 'dreams' (plural) so use 'them'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's family as a group. Also, use indirect question word order 'ask what the dreams indicate' rather than 'ask about what does the dreams indicate'. Combine clauses with a comma for clarity.

× Yes, I share my dreams with my mother specially because sometimes I dream about very weird stuffs that keeps repeating in my mind and I ask my mother about the meaning behind the dreams that I had that night.

✓ Yes, I share my dreams with my mother, especially because sometimes I dream about very strange things that keep repeating in my mind, and I ask her about the meaning of the dreams I had that night.

Word choice and agreement: 'specially' should be 'especially'. 'Stuffs' is incorrect; use 'things'. 'Keeps' must agree with plural 'things' so use 'keep'. Repeated reference to 'my mother' can be replaced with pronoun 'her'. Use 'meaning of the dreams I had that night' for smoother phrasing.

× Yes, I think dreams have special meaning because it shows us our hidden fears and desires that we seek in our daily life from other peoples and in my perspective it has special meaning for me.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have a special meaning because they show us our hidden fears and desires that we seek in our daily life from other people, and from my perspective they have special meaning for me.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'dreams' is plural so use 'they' and 'have'. Add the article 'a' before 'special meaning'. 'People' is plural; 'peoples' is incorrect here. Use 'from my perspective' and keep plural agreement 'they have'.

× Yes, of course I want to make my dreams come true because it's something that I've always wanted to achieve and everyone has a dream that they want to secure in their lives.

✓ Yes, of course I want to make my dreams come true because it's something I've always wanted to achieve, and everyone has a dream they want to fulfill in their lives.

Word choice and redundancy: 'it's something that I've' can be shortened to 'it's something I've'. 'Secure' is not the usual verb for realizing a dream; 'fulfill' or 'achieve' is better. Also remove unnecessary 'that' after 'dream' for natural phrasing.