电子邮件— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 모순되고 문법적으로 부자연스러우며, 명확한 주제 문장이 부족합니다. 'No'라고 시작했지만 곧바로 'I often send emails'라고 하여 혼란을 줍니다. 또한 'cacao' 대신 'KakaoTalk'와 같은 정확한 명칭을 사용하고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: No, I don't often send emails because I usually use KakaoTalk, a popular Korean chat application, which is more convenient. However, I sometimes send emails to my professors or for educational purposes.

建议: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 설명이 부족합니다. 'In my opinion'은 불필요하며, 문장을 완성하여 명확하게 의사를 전달하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I usually send emails to my professor when I have questions about my major. Sometimes, I also send messages through chat applications for quick communication.

建议: 답변이 주제에서 벗어나고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 중국의 이메일 사용에 대해 모를 경우 솔직하게 말하면서 한국과의 비교를 간결하게 하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: I'm not sure about email usage in China since I'm not Chinese. However, in Korea, many people use emails because it is a common communication method.

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 논리적인 연결이 부족합니다. 미래에 대한 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I think sending emails will become less popular in the future because instant messaging apps are more convenient and widely used. However, emails might still be used for formal communication.

× I usually use a cacao to address Korean chat application.

✓ I usually use Kakao, a Korean chat application.

The phrase 'use a cacao to address Korean chat application' is incorrect. 'Kakao' is the name of the app, and 'address' is not the correct verb here. The sentence should state that the student uses Kakao, a Korean chat application, directly. Also, 'a cacao' is incorrect; it should be 'Kakao' without an article.

× But I sometimes send emails to my professor or other education.

✓ But I sometimes send emails to my professor or other educators.

The phrase 'other education' is incorrect because 'education' is an uncountable noun and does not refer to people. The correct word is 'educators' to refer to other teachers or academic staff.

× In my opinion. I will send emails to my professor when I have some questions to my major studying and sometimes I send messages.

✓ In my opinion, I will send emails to my professor when I have some questions about my major studies, and sometimes I send messages.

The original sentence is fragmented and has awkward phrasing. 'In my opinion.' should be connected with the next sentence. 'Questions to my major studying' is incorrect; it should be 'questions about my major studies.' Also, the sentence needs a conjunction 'and' to connect the two clauses properly.

× I will send messages with.

✓ I will send messages as well.

The sentence 'I will send messages with.' is incomplete and unclear. It lacks an object or complement. Adding 'as well' clarifies the meaning that the student sends messages in addition to emails.

× I'm not Chinese so I don't know about that Chinese immense culture, but in Korea many people send mess, send emails because it is very general sending system.

✓ I'm not Chinese, so I don't know much about Chinese culture, but in Korea many people send messages and emails because it is a very common communication system.

The phrase 'that Chinese immense culture' is awkward and incorrect; 'much about Chinese culture' is better. 'Send mess' is incorrect; it should be 'send messages.' Also, 'very general sending system' is incorrect; 'very common communication system' is more appropriate.

× So many people use that.

✓ So many people use it.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used here to refer to the communication system. 'It' is the correct pronoun to refer to something previously mentioned.

× I think it's lost it because it's very popular sending message system, so many people still use that.

✓ I think it's losing popularity because messaging systems are very popular, so many people still use them.

'It's lost it' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'losing popularity.' 'Sending message system' is awkward; 'messaging systems' is better. Also, 'use that' should be 'use them' to refer to plural 'messaging systems.'

× So I think it's more it has more development to use comfortable, so many people more use that I think.

✓ So I think it will develop to be more comfortable to use, and more people will use it, I think.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It needs to be restructured to express the idea that the system will develop to be easier to use and that more people will use it in the future.