电子邮件— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word usage like 'listen emails'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, mention your job role and how it involves emailing clients, and specify the frequency or volume of emails you send.

示例: Yes, I often send emails because I work as an office administrative assistant. My main responsibility is to communicate with customers through email. For instance, I usually send around 100 emails to clients every day to address their inquiries and provide information.

建议: Your answer should be more concise and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Start with a direct response, then explain when and why you send emails, providing specific details.

示例: I usually send emails at the end of the day because my workday is very busy. This allows me to respond to all client inquiries efficiently and ensure that their questions are addressed before the next day.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Use clear and natural language, avoid redundancy, and provide specific reasons with linking words. Explain why email is popular in China with relevant details.

示例: Yes, sending emails is very popular in China because of the rapid advancement of technology. As technology improves, more people prefer to communicate through email since it is convenient and efficient compared to other methods.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors and be more specific about why emails will remain popular.

示例: I believe sending emails will become even more popular in the future because technology continues to advance. For example, many businesses operate online and prefer email communication since it is more convenient than phone calls. Additionally, emails allow busy individuals to respond at their own convenience.

× Yes, I often listen emails.

✓ Yes, I often listen to emails.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. The correct phrase is 'listen to emails'. This is a common prepositional usage error.

× The main role of my job is to communicate with the customers with the help of the emails.

✓ The main role of my job is to communicate with customers with the help of emails.

The definite article 'the' is not needed before 'customers' and 'emails' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× On every day I send the 100 emails to the clients.

✓ Every day I send 100 emails to clients.

'Every day' is the correct phrase (not 'On every day'). Also, 'the 100 emails' and 'the clients' are incorrect here; no article is needed when speaking generally. The number '100' does not require 'the' before it.

× So at the end of the day I try to send the emails to the all clients with their with their inquiries.

✓ So at the end of the day I try to send emails to all clients with their inquiries.

The phrase 'to the all clients' is incorrect; 'all clients' does not need 'the'. Also, 'the emails' is unnecessary here. Removing these articles improves the sentence's correctness.

× Yes, I can say that China also has a popular trend to sending emails.

✓ Yes, I can say that China also has a popular trend of sending emails.

The phrase 'trend to sending' is incorrect. The correct collocation is 'trend of sending'. This is a common error with prepositions following nouns like 'trend'.

× One of the main reasons is that the advanced technology nowadays.

✓ One of the main reasons is the advanced technology nowadays.

The article 'the' before 'advanced technology' is correct here, but the sentence is incomplete or awkward. The phrase 'that the advanced technology nowadays' is incorrect; 'that' should be removed to make the sentence grammatical.

× So as a technology is increasing day by day.

✓ So, as technology is increasing day by day,

The phrase 'as a technology' is incorrect; 'technology' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should be connected properly to the next clause.

× Every everything is communicated with the help of the emails and every person like to send the e-mail to other person rather than to.

✓ Everything is communicated with the help of emails, and every person likes to send emails to others rather than calling.

'Every everything' is incorrect; 'everything' alone suffices. 'The emails' should be 'emails' generally. 'Every person like' should be 'every person likes' for subject-verb agreement. The phrase 'to other person rather than to' is incomplete and unclear; it should be rephrased for clarity.

× If the individual is busy then they can revert back in later times.

✓ If the individual is busy, then they can revert back later.

The phrase 'revert back in later times' is awkward and incorrect. 'Revert back' is redundant; 'revert' alone suffices. Also, 'in later times' is unnatural; 'later' is preferred. Adding a comma after the conditional clause improves readability.