电子邮件— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'e-mail' multiple times and improve sentence structure for natural flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: No, I seldom send emails because they are mainly used for official work. Instead, I prefer phone calls or messaging apps for quick communication. However, when I need to send important documents to the office, I always use email as it is the most formal and reliable method.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetition. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details. Avoid repeating phrases like 'send e-mail' and use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I usually send emails whenever I need to submit important documents to my college or other institutions. For example, I use an email app to write and send these documents promptly.

建议: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical errors. Be specific about the popularity of emails in China and use correct subject-verb agreement. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'etcetera' and provide clear examples with linking words.

示例: Yes, sending emails is very popular in China. Many organizations use emails to communicate with their employees, and companies also use them for advertising and official announcements.

建议: Your answer has good points but needs grammatical corrections and clearer expression. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about why emails will remain popular. Avoid vague phrases like 'firewall protection are more'.

示例: In my opinion, sending emails will become more popular in the future because they are secure and convenient. For instance, you can send important documents or files safely without worry, thanks to advanced security measures like firewalls.

× No, I seldom write e-mail because they are mainly used for the official work.

✓ No, I seldom write emails because they are mainly used for official work.

The word 'e-mail' should be pluralized to 'emails' when referring to emails in general. Also, 'the official work' is incorrect; 'official work' is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× Usually I prefer other matters like phone calls, messaging, apps for quick communication.

✓ Usually I prefer other methods like phone calls, messaging, and apps for quick communication.

The word 'matters' is incorrect here; 'methods' or 'means' is appropriate when referring to ways of communication. Also, adding 'and' before 'apps' improves the list structure.

× However, when I need to send an important document for any office, I will always use e-mail as it most formal and reliable way.

✓ However, when I need to send an important document for any office, I will always use email as it is the most formal and reliable way.

The phrase 'it most formal and reliable way' is missing the verb 'is' and the definite article 'the' before 'most formal'. Also, 'e-mail' can be written as 'email' consistently.

× Well, there is no particular time to send e-mail when I have to send a e-mail important document to college or others.

✓ Well, there is no particular time to send an email when I have to send an important document to college or others.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'email' and 'important'. Also, 'a e-mail important document' is incorrect word order; it should be 'an important email document' or better 'an important document by email'. Here, 'an important document' suffices.

× So I write a e-mail through e-mail app and send it through e-mail app.

✓ So I write an email using an email app and send it through the email app.

The phrase 'through e-mail app' is awkward; 'using an email app' is better. Also, 'a e-mail' should be 'an email'. Adding 'the' before 'email app' clarifies the reference.

× Of course, sending emails are popular in every country because many organization use emails for sending information to their colleagues or workers.

✓ Of course, sending emails is popular in every country because many organizations use emails for sending information to their colleagues or workers.

The subject 'sending emails' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'organization' should be plural 'organizations' to agree with 'many'. Subject-verb agreement is important here.

× So sending emails are very popular not only organization for all advertisement purpose of many companies for college etcetera.

✓ So sending emails is very popular not only in organizations but also for all advertisement purposes of many companies and colleges, etc.

Again, 'sending emails' is singular and takes 'is' not 'are'. The phrase 'not only organization' should be 'not only in organizations'. 'Purpose' should be plural 'purposes' to match 'all advertisement'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× In my opinion, sending emails are more popular in the future because they are secure and convenient.

✓ In my opinion, sending emails will be more popular in the future because they are secure and convenient.

'Sending emails' is singular and should take 'is' if present tense, but since the sentence refers to the future, 'will be' is appropriate. Also, 'are more popular in the future' is incorrect tense usage.

× You can send any document or any file to other without any hesitation and in a secure way because the firewall protection are more in the emails.

✓ You can send any document or any file to others without any hesitation and in a secure way because firewall protection is stronger in emails.

'To other' should be 'to others' to indicate people. 'Firewall protection are' is incorrect; 'firewall protection is' is correct as 'protection' is uncountable. 'More in the emails' is awkward; 'stronger in emails' is clearer.