电子邮件— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid redundancy like “respond inquiries about the clients” — use “respond to client inquiries.”

示例: Yes — I send emails regularly for work. For example, I often respond to client inquiries about orders and schedules, usually twice a day.

建议: Structure the answer with a topic sentence and linked supporting details. Remove repetition (you said “to a colleague” twice). Use linking words (for example, sometimes, or otherwise) and give a specific context or frequency.

示例: I usually send emails at work to colleagues. For example, I email teammates to coordinate project tasks and occasionally reply to customer inquiries about our services.

建议: Give a clear opening sentence, then support with specific reasons and one brief example. Fix minor wording issues (“convenient to use to” → “more convenient to use”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Not really — emails are less popular in China. People prefer WeChat because it supports instant text and voice messages, group chats, and quick file sharing, which makes daily communication faster and easier.

建议: Provide a concise topic sentence, then give one or two clear reasons with a linking word. Avoid informal phrases like “gonna” and repetitive endings. Offer a brief prediction or example.

示例: I believe email will become less popular in the future because it is slower and usually requires more formal writing. Instead, I expect instant messaging apps to grow since they allow faster, more casual exchanges for everyday communication.

× I regularly send emails at work, mainly to respond inquiries about the clients.

✓ I regularly send emails at work, mainly to respond to inquiries about clients.

The verb phrase 'respond inquiries' is missing the preposition 'to' required after 'respond'. Also 'the clients' is unnecessarily definite; use 'clients' unless specific clients are meant. Suggestion: use 'respond to inquiries about clients.'

× I only send emails at work to a colleague, sometimes to a colleague to coordinate a project, and other times I respond to inquiries about our services.

✓ I only send emails at work to colleagues, sometimes to coordinate a project, and other times I respond to inquiries about our services.

Repeating 'a colleague' is awkward and singular when referring to different occasions. Use plural 'colleagues' to match general frequency. Also simplify redundant phrase 'to a colleague to coordinate' to 'to colleagues to coordinate' or 'to coordinate'. Suggestion: use plural when referring to non-specific people in habitual contexts.

× Instead, instant messaging apps like WeChat are much more popular because they allow users to send out messages and even voice notes immediately, and it's much more convenient to use to.

✓ Instead, instant messaging apps like WeChat are much more popular because they allow users to send messages and even voice notes immediately, and they are much more convenient to use.

The phrase 'send out messages' is acceptable but 'send messages' is more natural here. The clause ends with the redundant preposition 'to'; remove it. Also 'it's' refers ambiguously to 'apps' (plural), so use 'they are.' Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches its antecedent and avoid ending with unnecessary prepositions.

× I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because they are relatively slow and it takes a lot of effort to elaborate an e-mail, so it's not as convenient as other instant messaging apps.

✓ I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because they are relatively slow and it takes a lot of effort to compose an email, so they're not as convenient as other instant messaging apps.

The verb 'elaborate' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'compose' or 'write' when referring to creating an email. Also 'it takes' is acceptable but 'they're not' agrees with plural 'emails.' Suggestion: use 'compose/write an email' and keep pronoun agreement consistent.

× I think those are gonna be more popular in the future.

✓ I think those will be more popular in the future.

Informal 'gonna' should be replaced with 'will' in standard spoken or written English. Also be explicit about the antecedent 'those' (meaning instant messaging apps) is acceptable; keep 'will' for future tense. Suggestion: use 'will' instead of 'gonna' in formal corrections.