电子邮件— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce redundancy, and use smoother phrasing. Mention a brief reason or example with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating ideas (e.g., 'friends and relatives' and 'other persons').

示例: Yes, I send emails quite often. I mainly email friends and relatives, including some friends abroad, because I like sharing news and aspects of my culture with them.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence with correct grammar, and add a short reason using a linking word. Avoid wordy phrases like 'other persons' and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'it is very convenient').

示例: I usually send emails in the evening or at night because I have more free time then, so it is easier to write longer, thoughtful messages to family and friends.

建议: Be specific and accurate. Start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason or a brief comparison. Avoid mixing concepts (email and social media are different). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, email is widely used in China, especially for formal communication and work. However, for casual chats people often prefer messaging apps like WeChat.

建议: Provide a clear opinion with balanced reasoning and avoid exaggeration. Use linking words to present reasons and a brief prediction. Remove filler phrases like 'Speaking for only myself' and the trailing 'So.'

示例: I think email will remain important in the future, especially for business and formal communication, because it is reliable and easy to archive. That said, casual communication may shift more to instant messaging apps.

× Quite frequently, I enjoy sending emails to my friends and relatives, particularly also foreign friends with whom I like to share my culture and tradition.

✓ Quite frequently, I enjoy sending emails to my friends and relatives, particularly foreign friends with whom I like to share my culture and traditions.

The phrase 'particularly also' is redundant and awkward; use 'particularly' alone. 'Tradition' should be plural 'traditions' when referring to cultural practices in general. Suggestion: remove redundant conjunctions and use plural for general concepts.

× Usually I prefer sending emails to others in the evening as well as at night as it very convenient to keep in touch with my relatives and also other persons.

✓ Usually I prefer sending emails in the evening and at night because it is very convenient to keep in touch with my relatives and other people.

Missing linking verb 'is' after 'as' causes a grammatical error; 'as it very convenient' should be 'because it is very convenient'. 'As well as' is awkward here; use 'and'. 'Other persons' is formal and uncommon; use 'other people'. Suggestions: include the verb 'is', replace 'as well as' with 'and', and use 'people' instead of 'persons'.

× In China, sending emails is highly popular as it very convenient to interact with people and also it is great way to communicate on social media.

✓ In China, sending emails is very popular because it is very convenient for interacting with people and it is a great way to communicate.

Again missing verb 'is' after 'as' ('as it very convenient' -> 'because it is very convenient'). 'Highly popular' is awkward; use 'very popular'. 'Great way' needs the article 'a'. 'Communicate on social media' is redundant when referring to email; 'communicate' alone suffices. Suggestions: add 'is', use 'because', include article 'a', and simplify phrasing.

× Speaking for only myself, I guess sending emails will be massively popular in the upcoming years because it is more convenient and also highly preferable among people of all over the world. So.

✓ Speaking for myself, I guess sending emails will be very popular in the coming years because they are convenient and preferred by people all over the world.

'Speaking for only myself' is nonstandard; use 'Speaking for myself'. 'Massively popular' is informal; use 'very popular'. 'Upcoming years' -> 'coming years'. Subject-verb agreement: 'sending emails' (plural concept) pairs better with 'they are' rather than 'it is'. 'Highly preferable among people of all over the world' is awkward; use 'preferred by people all over the world'. The trailing 'So.' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestions: use natural collocations, ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid sentence fragments.