天赋— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating your talent first, then giving a specific example. For instance, say 'I have a good memory, especially for names of athletes, which I have had since I was very young.'

示例: I have a good memory, especially for names of athletes, which I have had since I was very young. For example, I could remember the names of my favourite baseball players even when I was four or five years old.

建议: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence coherence by linking ideas. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain how watching baseball helped improve your memory, and conclude with its lasting effect.

示例: My memory improved when I was in primary school because I often watched baseball games and learned the names of the athletes. This habit helped me develop my memory skills, which I still have today.

建议: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your points logically. For example, explain how your memory will help in your work and acknowledge any challenges you foresee.

示例: Yes, I believe my good memory will be useful in my future work because remembering names and details is important. However, I also understand that memory can decline with age, so I plan to keep practising to maintain it.

建议: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use clear vocabulary to express your idea. For example, say 'No, I don't think anyone in my family has the same talent because they find it difficult to remember old stories.'

示例: No, I don't think anyone in my family has the same talent because when I talk with my parents and brother, they often struggle to remember old stories.

× I don't have, uh, enough the talents, umm, but my memory is so much better than uh, other people, you know, umm, because I can record uh, all the name of umm, my favorite athlete or when I was even four or five years old.

✓ I don't have, uh, enough talents, umm, but my memory is so much better than uh, other people, you know, umm, because I can record uh, all the names of umm, my favorite athletes even when I was four or five years old.

The phrase 'enough the talents' is incorrect because 'enough' should be followed directly by a plural noun without 'the'. Also, 'all the name' should be plural 'all the names' to agree with 'all'. 'My favorite athlete' should be plural 'my favorite athletes' to match the context of multiple names. These are singular and plural issues that need correction.

× I think my memory is improved when I was in a primary school.

✓ I think my memory improved when I was in primary school.

The phrase 'is improved' is incorrect here because the action happened in the past. The correct past tense form is 'improved'. Also, 'a primary school' should be 'primary school' without 'a' because it refers to the general period of schooling, not a specific school.

× At that time I always watch baseball game and could understand the name of athletes.

✓ At that time I always watched baseball games and could understand the names of athletes.

The verb 'watch' should be in the past tense 'watched' to match the past time reference 'at that time'. 'Baseball game' should be plural 'baseball games' because it refers to multiple instances. 'The name of athletes' should be plural 'the names of athletes' to agree in number.

× And this ability keeps for a long time, even right now.

✓ And this ability has lasted for a long time, even right now.

The verb 'keeps' is incorrect here. The correct expression is 'has lasted' to indicate the ability has continued from past to present. 'Keeps' does not convey this meaning properly.

× Yes, I think my talent will, uh, perform efficiently in my work.

✓ Yes, I think my talent will, uh, be useful in my work.

The verb 'perform' is not typically used with 'talent' in this context. Instead, 'be useful' or 'help me perform efficiently' is more appropriate. The modal verb 'will' is correct, but the verb following it should be adjusted for natural usage.

× That's because, umm, January still requires the memory of the name and the feature of the stories.

✓ That's because, umm, my job still requires the memory of names and the features of stories.

'January' is likely a mispronunciation or error for 'my job'. Also, 'the memory of the name' should be 'memory of names' (plural) and 'the feature of the stories' should be 'features of stories' to be grammatically correct and natural. Pronoun and noun usage needs correction here.

× Umm. But as I grow up older, I come to understand that the disability will lose in the future.

✓ Umm. But as I grow older, I have come to understand that the disability will disappear in the future.

'Grow up older' is incorrect; 'grow older' is the correct phrase. 'I come to understand' should be 'I have come to understand' to indicate a recent realization. 'The disability will lose' is incorrect; 'disability will disappear' or 'will be lost' is more appropriate. The sentence needs tense and word choice corrections.

× No, I don't think my family have uh, such uh, tolerance, umm, because uh, when I talk with my parents and uh, uh, brother, it's, they cannot, uh, easily, uh, remember the old stories.

✓ No, I don't think my family has such tolerance, umm, because when I talk with my parents and my brother, they cannot easily remember old stories.

'My family have' should be 'my family has' because 'family' is a singular collective noun. 'Such uh, tolerance' is correct but 'uh' fillers should be minimized. 'It's, they cannot' is incorrect; 'they cannot' suffices. Also, 'the old stories' can be 'old stories' unless specific stories are meant. Pronoun and singular/plural agreement issues are present.